my feeling for her heartbreak(FEEDBACK)

[Dreamz]

I sit here disturbed by how you are feeling//
Your heart been broken there is no healing//
You and your emotions been stepped on like dirt//
I can see that you are very hurt//
If there is something I can do just let me know//
But for now I’ll leave you cause you need to go//
Tonight I will pray for you and hope that your heart will mend//
To help you get back to where you were over backwards I will bend//
You know how I feel about you, and you shouldn’t feel tears of sorrow//
My love and caring you can have or if you want you can borrow//
I sat there on the bus and seen your tears//
That moment brought to life my biggest fears//
I realize that something was wrong but you wouldn’t say it//
At that moment I wish it was you and I all the others would get//
You needed a friend to comfort you and hold you I was there//
I knew nothing would happen, I should of spoken up I was scared//
Deep inside I was crying with you because you look like you were torn apart//
At times like this you are uneasy with yourself I’m giving you feeling with all my heart//
I wish I could be the one that you could tell everything to but I’m not//
I can’t promise anything except for me trying let me give it a shot//
Your not looking for a boyfriend to hurt and harm you again//
I’m here for you and I wish you would say “where have you been?”//
I may not be a healer but I can stop some of the pain//
Never again do I want to see your tears fall like rain//
Cause it make me feel like you have no one but that is a lie//
A true friend that never wants to see you hurt the name is Ty//
I may not be close to you as other but in me you can rely//
Heart break comes and go trust me I know if you want ask my why//
I wish I had a chance to be your boyfriend but it will never happen//
Because I know we’re better off as friends the world is napping//
It quite and dark like an abandon alley off to the side//
Through your soul and mind I wish I could ride//
Let me tell to something deep it is from the heart boo//
If your torn apart and broken my love and friendship can help be your glue//
Being strong is being heartless no that wrong//
Over coming the pain and heartbreak that is strong//
Anyone could be heartless but a true strength is to have heart//
Not many people can do this but you can cause you have the smarts//
I’m there for you just look in the picture I drew//
My feeling and the memories are all for you//
Angels fallen from the heavens and need to be kept on the ground//
I wish I was one but you are the fallen angel that I found//
So please stop the crying and forget the pain look at the stars and make a wish//
Let me end this not on the lips but on your heart I’ll leave you with a kiss//  

[Inspectah]

You got the right mind, right typa flow, and topical scheme.. i liked this key. only thang i can really advise u on is make more exotic words feature in your songs.. like a more complex word, to get the feeling over more, other than that you've got the basics of a good keystyler.

[Dreamz]

yo thanks

[hope glimmers]

i think everyone is wondering who this fallen angel you always write about is, you must care for her a lot

[Dreamz]

that  I do I care for her more than anything

[hope glimmers]

well whoever she is,  shes lucky to get a guy that can write something like that

[Miss NWA Whoorider]

oh honey have you ever showed her this...............

she would melt,I know I did when I was reading it

(and yes I am female God dammit)

[Dreamz]

yeah i did and she loved it she pulled me aside and told me she loved it and gave hug a hug and kiss