West Coast Connection Forum
Elements => Tha Studio => Topic started by: Gay-o Felony on January 11, 2003, 01:29:33 PM
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Time for a new start, a fresh set of memories, the beginning of a new me//
Then my brain went through pressure back to the future, and regretful memories returned to me//
Like a small spark triggers a fire, my slight revealment of words prevailed into tradegy suddenly//
YOU ask me those questions, like they fuckin scared my memory, like im gonna remember//
Its old news, like your ex-personality, you've changed, i thought you were to be trusted, just a pretender//
A friend gradually turns to enemy, keepin' em closer, the phrase suddenly makes me suspicious//
Like i had a life before this one, and the phrase was to worn me this time, im so curious//
I'll keep my head low, even then i draw more attention than a military artist, nowadays gotta be tactical// [1]
Gotta live your life how you wanna, but im not gone be drastical, ima be practical, lifes made by other people, they make the decision in my head//
Wont come true, but the only time they realise, they shoulda stopped when they had the chance..... when im dead!//
Explanations:
1 = Draw = Artist / Attention = Army Technique, see the combination!?
Feedback Please!
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this shit is mad confusing at points, like u can make up your mind what it is u want to say.. humm is that why u call yourself that?
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don't know whats the matter with my friend timelock over here, but i was feelin' it
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lyrically it could be worked on and it had me lost a few times, but overall it was a nice spit
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I know its confuses people, but its just me getting some shit off ma chest thts all.. it was bout a friend bringin' back dug up memories going way back, i tell him shit, he goes behind my trust and splirts it all out!
Ind3cisiv3 - Timelock, they do call me Ind3cisiv3 for that reason yes, coz 1 minute im happy, the next im not, my emotions dont decide!
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I was feelin the overall flow of the verse.. But like TimeLock said.. you really need to logiclly construct your shit to make it better.. Its like a story in a way i supose.. you cant go from sayin... 'The cat is green' to 'the dog hasd a big cock' it jus dont make sense.
Try and order ya shit a bit more logicly... if you do wanna change subject do it.. but dont jump away from it two barz l8a..
Jus some pointers..
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'The cat is green' to 'the dog has a big cock' it jus dont make sense.
LOL