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Elements => Tha Studio => Topic started by: DiSSENT on June 06, 2005, 08:21:20 AM

Title: "Proverbs" (Wise Words)
Post by: DiSSENT on June 06, 2005, 08:21:20 AM

I think of life as a medley of both pain & Pleasure
you see, 1 person's garbage could be another's Treasure
no1 likes the hard road, plus, the easy road's Trivial
does any1 else care that the conditions are Pitiful?
they say that birth is an invitation to Death
but I'm 1 of the realest Left, so 'till my last Breath
I'm takin' Steps, the Next up to lead a Movement
if no1 else'll take charge, I'll aim for Improvements
does maturity bore the youth? Are we all Brainwashed?
how long will it take others to see, we're Str8 Crossed?
so many important issues ignored, we must Awaken
will people ever see Bush's true form is Satan?
way too much Hatin', we're all lambs in this Slaughter
you fight fire w/ fire, but you put it out w/ Water
an eye for an eye & everybody goes Blind As Hell
nothing is ever really certain, only Time Will Tell*

Title: Re: "Proverbs" (Wise Words)
Post by: hope glimmers on June 06, 2005, 09:28:15 AM

wow



i think that sums up my impressions of this one

Title: "Proverbs" (Wise Words)
Post by: DiSSENT on June 06, 2005, 10:09:21 AM

Quote from: hope glimmers on June 06, 2005, 09:28:15 AM

wow



i think that sums up my impressions of this one

Just trying to drop a jewel of enlightenment ;D Good lookin' out, Ash. Uppin' This & My Other Drops Being Slept On*

Title: Re: "Proverbs" (Wise Words)
Post by: realz on June 07, 2005, 02:41:30 PM

your gf was great last night

Title: Re: "Proverbs" (Wise Words)
Post by: ainsy on June 07, 2005, 04:04:29 PM

wot an amazin sense of humour  this guy has^^^. nyways, Dissent, i think this piece is rly good, esp the end, but i think that other than the end its too basic, n tht u kood try n add more multis, wordplay  etc in, its good to read, and flow is good tho (Y) keep elevatin man (Y)

Title: Re: "Proverbs" (Wise Words)
Post by: DiSSENT on June 08, 2005, 08:25:50 AM

I gotta agree with you, I did dumb down on this verse..not purposely, but I wrote it fairly quick & I was just trying to throw some proverbs I had read up in there. I know I could make it more lyrical, I'll try to work on that. Thank you very much for all the input & commentary. I appreciate it all! Uppin'*