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Elements => Tha Studio => Topic started by: T.J. on August 05, 2003, 07:06:38 PM
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battle of the 14 year olds... ;D
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haha
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TWO 14 YEAR OLDS WITH SKILL NEVER THE LESS.
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Bold Lines are are regular punchlines
Underline is Wordplay
Both Are Personal Punchlines
Thrown from planes to test gravity leave u battered bruised and injured
You tried ya luck but now ya 'pride is fucked' like anal sex with 'simba'!!(Sorry..I was watchin Lion King)
Tj Tj Tj, What was you thinkin, Makin it rappin?
You a fuckin Blow Job punchline waitin to happen...
Breakin this fag in, Don't mind what ya heard he say...
Cause if ya ever punch DayGo in the Dick ya might hurt TJ!! (Dick Rider)...
I got this shit easy, it's what they call Messiah Complex...
Still wanted sex after i dissed him, caught me outta "Con"Text..
Fuck turnin red ur shit is horrid.. so i'll stay back and spray
Embarass ya so bad you'll be greener, than the hulk on st.pattys day
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jem greener would have a better context with being 'new' like you green.. red was embarassment but good verse nonetheless .. lez see it Tj
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ill get at this soon
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Jemuel....
battlin me? like war-stricken civilians, u must have been on some heavy mind lapse/ (mine laps)
Strip you down to a "mule", only "gems" you ever had were fake diamond scraps/ (Gem-mule, Jemuel)
the only way you could possess a "W" is if you stole the golden arches n rotated/ 1
like ghetto supermarket juice aisles, you punches are too damn outdated/
claims you were in jail for assault, did you beat the fluff out your bedside teddy bear?/ 2
this fool's hidin the truth, he's pretending to be straight like a pimp daddy's hair/ 3
your multi's never hit the spot, like gettin a fuck off a klutz/
im like a protective squirrel, so get the fuck off my nuts, biiiiiatch!
1 - Golden Arches = the McDonalds symbol
2 - http://www.dubcnn.com/connect/index.php?board=11;action=display;threadid=38647 bitch.... your 14 how the fuck can you go to jail
3 - pimps always have their hair straightened, n its hardly ever natural like that
vote
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vote!
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too even.. i would call this a draw anyway..
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argh! damn you... ;D
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Jemuel....
battlin me? like war-stricken civilians, u must have been on some heavy mind lapse/ (mine laps)
Strip you down to a "mule", only "gems" you ever had were fake diamond scraps/ (Gem-mule, Jemuel)
the only way you could possess a "W" is if you stole the golden arches n rotated/ 1
like ghetto supermarket juice aisles, you punches are too damn outdated/
claims you were in jail for assault, did you beat the fluff out your bedside teddy bear?/ 2
this fool's hidin the truth, he's pretending to be straight like a pimp daddy's hair/ 3
your multi's never hit the spot, like gettin a fuck off a klutz/
im like a protective squirrel, so get the fuck off my nuts, biiiiiatch!
1 - Golden Arches = the McDonalds symbol
2 - http://www.dubcnn.com/connect/index.php?board=11;action=display;threadid=38647 bitch.... your 14 how the fuck can you go to jail
3 - pimps always have their hair straightened, n its hardly ever natural like that
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shit sux that your personals dropped on you...Jemuel is pronounced as Jamil...and it was my 5th offence of assault i wasn't incarcerated just held. O yea dawg...im 15 since March 24... >:(
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lol. Get up on bboys, and why you always battlin newbies every where you go?
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5th offence of assult? you'd be in lock up till you were 18 I got one aggressive assult an I was on teather for 3 months
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Jemuel....
battlin me? like war-stricken civilians, u must have been on some heavy mind lapse/ (mine laps)
Strip you down to a "mule", only "gems" you ever had were fake diamond scraps/ (Gem-mule, Jemuel)
the only way you could possess a "W" is if you stole the golden arches n rotated/ 1
like ghetto supermarket juice aisles, you punches are too damn outdated/
claims you were in jail for assault, did you beat the fluff out your bedside teddy bear?/ 2
this fool's hidin the truth, he's pretending to be straight like a pimp daddy's hair/ 3
your multi's never hit the spot, like gettin a fuck off a klutz/
im like a protective squirrel, so get the fuck off my nuts, biiiiiatch!
1 - Golden Arches = the McDonalds symbol
2 - http://www.dubcnn.com/connect/index.php?board=11;action=display;threadid=38647 bitch.... your 14 how the fuck can you go to jail
3 - pimps always have their hair straightened, n its hardly ever natural like that
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shit sux that your personals dropped on you...Jemuel is pronounced as Jamil...and it was my 5th offence of assault i wasn't incarcerated just held. O yea dawg...im 15 since March 24... >:(
seriously.... shut up.... youre just trying to bring my verse down so you can get cheapshot votes... just shut up.
where the fuck are the votes
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...jesus...yall never get the point...
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Jemuel - Nice verse. Seems like ya didn't focus much on keystyle elements or none of that and went straight at the punches, and they were pretty hard hittin, although i've seen better from you. Overall 4.1
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Breakin this fag in, Don't mind what ya heard he say...
Cause if ya ever punch DayGo in the Dick ya might hurt TJ!! (Dick Rider)...
TJ - Nice verse also TJ. Like Jem you didn't focus on keystyle elements either and stuck to punchlines. They were semi-hard hittin, the metas you use could be a tad more complex ya know? the first couple lines were tight tho with the wordplay, but the verse fell off from there. Overall 4.0
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battlin me? like war-stricken civilians, u must have been on some heavy mind lapse/ (mine laps)
Strip you down to a "mule", only "gems" you ever had were fake diamond scraps/ (Gem-mule, Jemuel)
Reason - The verses were pretty equal, but I felt that Jem's punchlines were hitting a little harder and were more complex.
Winner - Jemuel
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Yuk, Yuk, Yuk, this battle was not pretty at all. Sorry its taken me a while to vote up but I really found it hard to actually enjoy this battle at all. Both verses look like they had been thrown together in 5 minutes and I am sorry to say but they both sucked ass. JEM why do you continue to battle with 10 bars, its a waist of time. If you gunna battle somebody make the battle a worth while read and have 15-20 bars or sumthin.....I really think that 10 bars doesnt give anybody really enough room to actually hurt there opponent, instead ya just end up with weak punches crammed into a verse. Anyway the battle was very weak and it actually bored me hile readin it.
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Jem: No need for the Bold, underline shit either, all that did was make me refer to it all the time throughout your verse and therefore destryin the flow. Not really any multies in there, the flow was ok, the wordplay was ok, the punches where ok but the subjects that where used for the punches cudda been better. This verse was no where near your best..........I thought the first 2 lines, the simba thing was a bit poor and the rest of the verse was ok but still it wasn't really a good battle verse.
Fav Line(s):
Breakin this fag in, Don't mind what ya heard he say...
Cause if ya ever punch DayGo in the Dick ya might hurt TJ!! (Dick Rider)...
Score: 2.00
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T.J: Very weak from you aswell. The last 4 lines where awful, teddy bear shit???? ya cudda done better than that. Your verse was very poor, the punches where very weak, you tried a personel in there with the whole 14 year old prison thing but it didnt come off because ya used a teddy bear and shit for the punch, it was weak. Ya flow was ok but no multies in there. This is the worst verse I have seen from you so far, it was almost like you either, couldent be bothered, b, didnt have anything going on in ya mind at the time or c, you just fell off big time. A major improvement is needed in your next battle dawg.
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the only way you could possess a "W" is if you stole the golden arches n rotated/ 1
like ghetto supermarket juice aisles, you punches are too damn outdated/
Score: 1.90
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I have given the win to Jem becaue even though both verses where very weak Jem's jsut edged it a bit for me. I would of liked to of given this one a draw but T.J's last four lines in his verse made me realise that Jem's just proberly edged it for me. IMO this was the worst battle I have read to date and I think ya'll need to spend a little more time on your verses, Jem you maybe need to stop battling everyone because that verse lacked anyhing really special and T.J maybe you need to just take a small beak from this shit........if not then I think ya both need to show us what ya really made of the next time you battle.
Sorry for being so harsh bu I have always been an honest voter and its proberly why this shit is gettin so slept on.....because people dont wanna come in and say that it sucked.......well I've just done it for them.
WINNER: JEM
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I'll get my vote on..
Jem- I liked the punches and some of the word play, although besides the punch about TJ bein a dickrider there wasn't really many personals in ya verse. Some of the wordplay was funny (Simba) but overall verse wasn't as tight as usual. Not many multis either, although that's not that important. Fav line:
Tj Tj Tj, What was you thinkin, Makin it rappin?
You a fuckin Blow Job punchline waitin to happen...
Overall the verse...hmmm...3.5/5
TJ-Your punches were all clever and funny, your verse impressed me the first time I read it and continues to make me chuckle. Good wordplay (mine laps, lol/ outdated punches) lol and good flow. Right away your verse seemed to hit harder and show more creativity.
Score: 4.2/5
As you can see, winner...TJ, just came with a better overall verse.
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bez... cant really understand your votin system... but oh well. thx for votin anyway.
keep votin
i wanna see maxi padz vote on this, that muddafucka know how to judge.
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bez... cant really understand your votin system... but oh well. thx for votin anyway.
keep votin
i wanna see maxi padz vote on this, that muddafucka know how to judge.
I know how to judge. I liked his verse better so I gave him the win. I thought your verse lacked n e thing really good, didnt make me laugh, didnt make me go wow, didnt hit em hard at all, all I did was read it, no emotion involved. Jem's was basically the same but I awarded the win to Jem because it got a lil harder towards the end of his verse, while yours didnt IMO.
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a bez vote
introduktion
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first verse crit
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second verse crit
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conclusion and vote
~aint rocket science..
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IS THAT BAD?????
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good detailed vote actually.. TJ was just questioning your 'system'
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i was just wonderin why the extremely low scores, for both of us, lol. i got the answer just then. im not sayin i should have gotten his vote or anything like that
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Low scores because I didnt like the verses, very uninteresting to me.
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His voting system works for him, now people shut up and vote...
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His voting system works for him, now people shut up and vote...
*decides not to vote*
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His voting system works for him, now people shut up and vote...
*decides not to vote*
You already voted on the Bez battle so it dont matter.
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wtf?? vote
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both verses were shitty and about the same in punches and ect., but i'm gunna have to go with jem because imo TJs verse didn't flow as well
vote = jem
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wtf?? no