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Elements => Tha Studio => Topic started by: Lunatic on October 01, 2008, 02:22:39 PM

Title: swagga' like me..
Post by: Lunatic on October 01, 2008, 02:22:39 PM

ain't nobody got swagga' like a lunatic
jeans sag low and my wallet extra thick
my wallet so big and this money can't fit
keep it with a rubber band
ain't stoppin' til i own my own land
that's real big, like the glock in my pants
beat so dirty dog, to it do ya own dance
look at me with ya shades, my future bright
my record travellin' faster than the speed of light
get my own film division company, hater i might
u so far behind me, not even puttin' up a fight
catch me walkin' through the club
rag fallin' out my pocket throwin' up the dub
not a gang banger, got it with me as a fashion statement
catch me buyin' a jet in one shot, one payment
get the money and i throw this
im hot 2 death, u ain't notice?

Title: Re: swagga' like me..
Post by: El the Self Image on October 02, 2008, 04:13:43 PM

hmmm, I like this one better than the last one I read from you....

I used to use the keystyle forums as an avenue to sharpen my lyrics for recording..... I hope you're doing the same...


ain't nobody got swagga' like a lunatic
jeans sag low and my wallet extra thick
my wallet so big and this money can't fit
**OK, you broke the scheme too soon, try to keep your bars even as much as possible. and if you're going to break scheme, the next bar should have as many syllables in it as the last one**
keep it with a rubber band

ain't stoppin' til i own my own land
that's real big, like the glock in my pants
beat so dirty dog, to it do ya own dance
**also, if you're going to break the rhyme scheme, it's good to catch back up like you did here :) **
look at me with ya shades, my future bright
my record travellin' faster than the speed of light
get my own film division company, hater i might
u so far behind me, not even puttin' up a fight
catch me walkin' through the club
rag fallin' out my pocket throwin' up the dub
not a gang banger, got it with me as a fashion statement
catch me buyin' a jet in one shot, one payment
get the money and i throw this
im hot 2 death, u ain't notice?
 
**I still think it's a bit too simple... spice it up fam...**
 

Title: Re: swagga' like me..
Post by: Lunatic on October 02, 2008, 06:28:54 PM

^props for readin and the feedback!

Title: Re: swagga' like me..
Post by: Primo on October 04, 2008, 03:45:59 PM

No ones got swagga like moi\
intercourse this blonde right un dos tois\
drinking miller till its misprounounced like Kevin Millar\