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Elements => Tha Studio => Topic started by: Pillow on October 27, 2002, 12:52:34 PM

Title: blood, sweat and tears (poem)
Post by: Pillow on October 27, 2002, 12:52:34 PM

i write poems every once and a while, but when i do i always make shure to put my heart into em cause i want them to mean something, please gimme some feedback on this one, thanks...........

I fall~>sweat
Just by workin hard
I scream~>tears
Because no one hears
I cut~>blood
To watch myself bleed

Therefore this is~>blood,sweat,~n~tears

I slice away hopping to take my life away.~>blood
i cry and yell hoping someone hears.
~>tears
i work hard, picking up my life of the ground~>sweat

there is nothing but blood,sweat and tears.

I am getting 25 slashes~>blood
STOP PLEASE, eyez red because of~> tears.
I am trying to get away. The effort was endure in~>sweat.

All blood, tears, and sweat.

I cut faster and faster, so I sweat.
Harder and harder, so I cry
I think i cut a vein...so i bleed.

All sweat, tears, and blood

My life is nothing but one big war. What ever problem i solve i get another one, so i just sweat, and sweat.

Losing love ones and being denie love alwayz make me cry.

I use to weep day in and day out, but now i am strong,
those are tears.

Hacking away at ur skin makes u bleed, wanting to be sucidal, yes indeed.
If your not bleeding physical, deep down mentally you are. so i bleed

I bleed with being hopeless and feeling nothing.
I cry about beening choke by my father and then wishing he choke harder so i can die.
I sweat because half of the time my efforts in life are in vein...

That is why it is Blood, Sweat and Tears...
peace........

~Blanket~

Title: Re:blood, sweat and tears (poem)
Post by: Reef on October 27, 2002, 01:17:34 PM

Man.. That was dope.

Really unique style there, ive never seen anything like that. Really fresh idea and i like the way you expressed your thoughts and explained how they like related to the blood sweat & tears.

Really nice man.. makes a change for the board.

Peace

Title: Re:blood, sweat and tears (poem)
Post by: bez on October 27, 2002, 02:15:45 PM

dope as fuck.  

Title: Re:blood, sweat and tears (poem)
Post by: Kill on October 27, 2002, 02:41:02 PM

That was sum really fresh and unique shit. Props

Title: Re:blood, sweat and tears (poem)
Post by: ToNe1904 on October 27, 2002, 04:56:02 PM

tight man..

Title: Re:blood, sweat and tears (poem)
Post by: Fatal619 on October 28, 2002, 12:59:03 AM

hottt playa
keep em' comin

one.