West Coast Connection Forum
Elements => Tha Studio => Topic started by: Koncept on December 03, 2002, 02:57:30 PM
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A bullet rips through the flesh of a young bird fresh from the nest//
Can you guess the message hidden in text//
because the bird is a child, you see, only three//
a bystander caught in the middle of a grown man fantasy//
surrounded by guns, silence and violence, that’s all he sees//
playing in the streets he feels a pain then starts to bleed//
he screams for his mom because his daddy’s gone//
but there’s too much shit going on in the background//
stray bullets hits a kid, for what, a half pound//
I know this hurts but it’s real life, listen to the sound//
of a poet at hart from the underground//
get up, stand up, take a look around//
I’m not here to preach, but to entertain//
but if I make a change, I'll still remain...true//
to my god, to my family and you//
Feedback welcome
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yo man that was dope, nice rhyme scheme, deep also, much props....
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Much props man. That was nice, and as you say... poetic. Sad to see a child like that... nice deepness connecting it with something else to show exactly how we take things. And good picture painting.
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nice key
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Felt it dawg, kep droppin kidda!
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thinks for the response
i was high when i wrote that
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that was some real nice shit there.. Nice rhyme scheme and deeep..
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Never written shit when I was high, but it'd prolly be different...nice spit, good picture paintin
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i was high when i wrote that
lol weed opens up ur mind when ppl say it makes u stupid....pshhh lol
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No doubt