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Elements => Tha Studio => Topic started by: Ignyte on March 30, 2003, 10:17:57 PM

Title: Freestyle
Post by: Ignyte on March 30, 2003, 10:17:57 PM

i make your spine ricochet, off my fist at any time of the day/
so dont dare come my way, unless your willing to pay/
or your gonna learn how to play, a different type of game, where you pray/
so "say what you say" but when i meet you, ill be "in da club" signed up with dre/
bet you ass that i am bigger, and you can start to reconsider/
that my beef with you is bitter, coz i shit on you cats that yal run for yal kitty litter/
but that is how i am always on the grind, i stroll through the clubs with pussy on my mind/
i get all yal yungins coming up to me asking for a rhyme, but like i say to everyone i aint got the time/
i showed this girl my dick it almost made her blind, but nobody told me a big dick was a crime/
im like everybody i work 5 til 9, but after work im dressed to impress coz i got punani to find/

first spit that ive put on this board
not that good, feedback please

Title: Re:Freestyle
Post by: 'Illicit' on March 31, 2003, 01:47:55 AM

not too bad actually, lil simplistic, a bit hard to overlook, lackin structure, but some cool lines in it.  

keep postin tho, homie.

peace

Illicit

Title: Re:Freestyle
Post by: T.J. on March 31, 2003, 03:40:35 AM

not bad. like illicit said it lacked structure, but it was fairly good. keep writin up.

Title: Re:Freestyle
Post by: Disceptive AssAssin on March 31, 2003, 06:04:14 AM

2mics...

Title: Re:Freestyle
Post by: ·SiNiStEr· on March 31, 2003, 05:42:48 PM

decent.. even though you kinda got this..

**weak  line**
**punch line**
**weak line**
**punch line**


overall not bad.