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Elements => Tha Studio => Topic started by: C-Bizz on June 22, 2003, 09:05:55 AM

Title: Intro to a song |keystyle|
Post by: C-Bizz on June 22, 2003, 09:05:55 AM

All these motherfuckers complain that I'm lame/
I won't stop til I clock hip hop as my game/
Keep lickin shots til you hear clear to-my-name/
Still King C-Dubb so-supreme as I reign/
C-Bizz aka. Sho' Bizz entertains/
I know you see me as-a-nigga quick-to-blame/
Recap on this strap a top view of your brain/
Make-you-feel every fucken detail to-my-pain/
I might aswell leave as quick as I came/
In the car switchin lanes playin crept as-we-came/
I might aswell leave as quick as I came/
In the car switchin lanes playin crept as-we-came.../

I was thinking of having this as an intro to a song I'm writing up. It doesnt have timing and shit if you read it slow and I'm gonna rap it fast anyway.

Tell us what you think, I like to see some feedback.

Title: Re:Intro to a song |keystyle|
Post by: ·SiNiStEr· on June 22, 2003, 09:29:44 AM

its ok..
i just wish people would stop using game-name-lame in they verse

Title: Re:Intro to a song |keystyle|
Post by: Juda on June 24, 2003, 09:28:23 PM

 meh, itz ok

Title: Re:Intro to a song |keystyle|
Post by: 'Illicit' on June 25, 2003, 02:44:09 PM

well yeh it was aight, and yeh partly Sin is right but then again if you can make somethin out of it by using game-lame-name then I wouldnt mind at all.
but that was a lil simplistic.

Title: Re:Intro to a song |keystyle|
Post by: |JEM|ILL| on June 25, 2003, 05:37:57 PM

I didn't like it...and unless I had to I wouldn't listen to the song it's too...BUT! You CAN make this audible, You need to get the flow down and more of a rhyme scheme to it then same ol' same ol'...switch it up add some wordplay, Im just sayin Simplicity delutes talent... Keep Elevatin...

Azul

Title: Re:Intro to a song |keystyle|
Post by: C-Bizz on June 27, 2003, 08:52:12 AM

thanks for the feedback, ill work on it.