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Elements => Tha Studio => Topic started by: T.J. on July 22, 2003, 05:10:51 AM

Title: I can't go to sleep remix (poem/keystyle)
Post by: T.J. on July 22, 2003, 05:10:51 AM

i dont give a fuck if u dont feel this..... just lettin shit out.... wrote it at 3am last nite



What the fuk is going on, i cant go to sleep
too many thoughts running through my mind, i cant go to sleep
depression's overcome me, is life really worth living?
Constant conflict of emotions, do i deserve what i was given?
i think so, my kind of attitude deserves no gratitude
after all the oppurtunities youve given me, god why am i still mad at you?
i need to take advantage of everything that comes my way
life aint no joke, fuck the bud smoke, u gotta work hard day by day
after these years of laziness, craziness and not givin a fuck
is it too late to climb out of this abyss in which i am stuck?
day by day i dug myself deeper, look at the end result
a 15 year old on the verge of failure, say it, its not an insult
as of this day i vow to turn my life around in a flash
work harder for my future stability; it all comes down to the cash
show more self-respect, end this not givin a fuck mentality
whole of my life i spent in dreamworld, time to snap back to reality


its weird what you write when u cant sleep

Title: Re:I can't go to sleep remix (poem/keystyle)
Post by: da_notorious_mack on July 22, 2003, 02:19:47 PM

i was feelin this...nice shit...

Title: Re:I can't go to sleep remix (poem/keystyle)
Post by: bez on July 22, 2003, 02:36:55 PM

dam man I really really really felt it.

Hope you dont take offense to this but I think your rhymin style in that rhyme was kind of simliar to mine.  it flowed well and made sense and was good to read.

I have always had problems sleeping and it is quite wierd the rhymes you can write when your suppose to be asleep.  Crazy.  Good shit tho mate.

Title: Re:I can't go to sleep remix (poem/keystyle)
Post by: ·SiNiStEr· on July 22, 2003, 03:37:31 PM

^ ditto..

Title: Re:I can't go to sleep remix (poem/keystyle)
Post by: T.J. on July 23, 2003, 02:20:46 AM

Quote from: ::-Bez-:: on July 22, 2003, 02:36:55 PM

dam man I really really really felt it.

Hope you dont take offense to this but I think your rhymin style in that rhyme was kind of simliar to mine.  it flowed well and made sense and was good to read.

I have always had problems sleeping and it is quite wierd the rhymes you can write when your suppose to be asleep.  Crazy.  Good shit tho mate.

hehe... yeh i just read it when i was out of my writing zone and i noticed it was kinda similar to the shit you write.... which is a good thing right??
hopefully something else comes up in my head 2nite and i write something else.

thx for the feedback, more if possible

Title: Re:I can't go to sleep remix (poem/keystyle)
Post by: Reef on July 24, 2003, 04:57:55 AM

Nice shit.. I liked the whole idea of it man

Title: Re:I can't go to sleep remix (poem/keystyle)
Post by: ZILLA THA GOODFELLA on July 26, 2003, 01:36:20 AM

feel that shit 151%

Title: Re:I can't go to sleep remix (poem/keystyle)
Post by: T.J. on August 02, 2003, 03:54:04 AM

uppin