West Coast Connection Forum
Elements => Tha Studio => Topic started by: HaUzTiLe on June 02, 2004, 03:44:40 PM
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This is a verse to make ya'll think.//
Life gets me down so much I feel like Im gonna sink.//
Living in the city of angels but all I see are demons.//
Speaking of demons, I nut up in a bitch wit no rubber and leave my semen.//
No voice for the poor, so they suffer.//
The rich had a voice till I killed Michael Buffer.//
And this world needs to open their eyes.//
Our president hides behind a disguise.//
But I see his nEW World oRDER.//
Im an AMERICAN, but no chance of me being in his corner.//
Hopefully he crashes and burns.//
Then I'll grab his ashes and stick em in an urn.//
I wanna be a voice for the people, but they all attack me.//
If u hate me so much, step to me as a man, and try to crack me.//
I'll come around and strike you like lighting.//
Im the soldier who will go down fighting.//
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yo man it was dope keep it up
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Speaking of demons, I nut up in a bitch wit no rubber and leave my semen.//
I liked everything but this line...itz hella off topic....and it does'nt make much sense either...what do demons have to do with nuttin in a bitch?...
but other than that....it was a cool lil verse....
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Propz to the both of you fo droppin yo comments, as for the "bitches and demons" lol... Wit my past experiences bitches are demons, in a freestyle your mind goes out in all directions. I think demons, I picture a bitch.
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i think it was deep overall, good thoughtz, good passagez, but this line with the bitch didnt fit at all n is kinda upsettin yo piece. but i liked readin it.............hm.......
oh yeah, my two favorite passagez are:
-And this world needs to open their eyes.//
Our president hides behind a disguise
-I'll come around and strike you like lighting.//
Im the soldier who will go down fighting
yeah, theyre dope, i think
keep up writin
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I'll come around and strike you like lighting.//
Im the soldier who will go down fighting.//
yo this linez dope... but im sure you iz able to do much more of this topic, cuz i think this idea is realy tight..
but i think im a wrong man to judge about topix.....but nervertheless...think of it
and keep it up, i think you got potential, but you should practice more wid it ;)
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Propz to all of you for your positive, truthful, comments...