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Elements => Tha Studio => Topic started by: DiSSENT on June 01, 2005, 01:27:09 PM

Title: "Ghetto Life (L.A. Times)"
Post by: DiSSENT on June 01, 2005, 01:27:09 PM

Everyday's the same shit, write rhymes & Look For Jobs
watchin' the cops roll by laughin, the fuckin' Crooked Slobs
I walk down the block, to grab me a News Paper
and read the headlines, more fresh murders & New Capers
those are "L.A. Times" for you, going Legit Is Rough
whether workin' legal or hustlin', dudes Bullshit & Bluff
I'm not trying to be pessemistic cuz I'm Glad I'm Alive
but I think, "How did I have shit so Bad & Survive?"
while rich people live happy, secure & overly Wealthy
I grew up w/ friends who worked to keep their family's Healthy
I know many have it worse than me; I'm Blessed, I Guess
but my dreams are all nightmares cuz I'm Oppressed & Stressed
what fuels my fiery drive? I'm stuck here, Left In A Rut
yet, I find it in me to represent the West, From My Gut
drive-by's nightly, bangin' daily, it's gon' be Forever Strife
but what doesn't kill me gives me strength, that's Ghetto Life*

Title: Feedback?
Post by: DiSSENT on June 11, 2005, 08:44:49 AM

Any comments/input on this verse in particular? It's some real, heartfelt shit - Uppin'!*

Title: Re: "Ghetto Life (L.A. Times)"
Post by: ainsy on June 12, 2005, 03:34:18 AM

good piece, but sum of it didnt go right i dont think, and flow was bit off at times, but sum rly good parts in it and im feelin wot your sayin, nuffin 2 special from you, but still quite good (Y)

Title: Re: "Ghetto Life (L.A. Times)"
Post by: K0NfUzIoN on June 12, 2005, 09:05:33 PM

not your best flow, but u got your message on an tru topic

Title: "Ghetto Life (L.A. Times)"
Post by: DiSSENT on June 13, 2005, 07:23:20 AM

Good lookin' out on the feedback, guys. It's greately appreciated. Uppin'*

Title: Re: "Ghetto Life (L.A. Times)"
Post by: HammerTime on June 13, 2005, 07:59:10 AM

Been reading your stuff for awhile, and every single one of your rhymes are awesome...I wasn't feeling this one as much as your other rhymes, but you got good stuff....Infact, I might just steal some of your lines to use in my own rhymes......Nah, but keep up the good work dude.... 8)