West Coast Connection Forum
Elements => Tha Studio => Topic started by: one trak mind on June 01, 2005, 10:30:27 PM
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The simultaneous experience/ having fractured dreams collapse in the mirror/ dreams have me delirious/ seriously outside its cool but its all heat in the interior/see my exterior makes your perception inferior/ striped down to nothin/ slippin out of control and time is runnin/ so my rhyme is hummin/ blowing at light speed/ blight diseases holds my mind feed/ so all my eyes see is trouble and crisis/ it might be an accidental disaster/ the way I look at you brings damage collateral/ so my raps flow in rhyme and verse/ life ain’t poetic sometimes its straight tragedy rehearsed/ laid in gold sometimes you need someone to pave the road/ and right before you’re stuck on the street curs’n/put your name in dirt and ask you if your vanity is better or worst.
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Very poetic, I was kind of feeling it. Could've touched up the end rhymes a little bit. But the beginning was dope as fuck, the pattern & all. Keep doin' your thing & improving, dawg. I liked it - Stay up, Peace*