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Title: My first rhyme
Post by: h cottie is bac-tive? on July 13, 2005, 11:44:28 AM

my first ever rhyme never wrote down a line
spent all my time workin at a 9 to 5
place was a burger joint but i got caught smokin tree 8)
boss even had the balls to give me a loitering fee
said if i dont move my ass hes gonna call the police
so i put a red brick thru his new GT
immediately looked at me
but all he could say was nigga you crazy??
whipped out the 6 inch took a nice pee pee
i replied i just got promoted to a vigilante ;) 8


dont be too harsh! :-*

Title: Re: My first rhyme
Post by: Prolific on July 13, 2005, 01:01:22 PM

Dog I ain't gonna be harsh..But if this was on a track it would be on "Step Yo Game Up" for sure...Cats like me dig punchlines, multi's, wordplay and stronger rhyme..Just lookin out..Peace

Title: Re: My first rhyme
Post by: authentic on July 13, 2005, 02:50:14 PM

ay thats tight but put it in keystyle...cause thats the place where you could get recognition for your writtens. This is for audios

Title: Re: My first rhyme
Post by: h cottie is bac-tive? on July 13, 2005, 10:27:41 PM

lol "step yo game up" i like that