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Title: Her final words(FEEDBACK)
Post by: Dreamz on August 03, 2005, 07:59:49 PM

She lays there bleeding her blood, drag'd through the mud
Her head hits the stone *THUD*, no sign of the flood
Eyes blind in the mist, draining blood from the wrist
Does she try to exist, only to be knock'd down by a fist
Is she out back, doing lines of coke and smoking crack
Hiding the tracks, she thinks everyone ones attacks
Laying there holding her chest, cant breath so depressed
Barely dressed, holding on to faith waiting to be blessed
wishing three feet away was heaven, but hit by the sins of seven
trying to count to eleven, keeps seeing her angel of heaven
Has her ife just ended or begun, feeeling like life is being undone
Torn and ripped apart finshed done, only thing left is the midnight sun
she stops there outta breath, cant see straight high on meth
she qoutes from macbeth, before her death......................

"Things without all remedy
Should be without regard; what ’s done is done."
(macbeth act 3 sence 2)

She speaks these sounds, with another bottle to pound
Her heaven's angels turn to devil clowns as she spins round
Spinning and trying to find the light, Eyes blinded so bright
Trying to stay right but can't becuase she lossing sight
Realizing she needing something to stop the bleeding
Finding everything misleading, going down so fast she speeding
Blood and Snot dripping from her nose, everything hurts and the pain it grows
She has been exposed, she ripped and torn with nothing to show
Beaten down and raped, she still crying over the video tape
Cut and Scraped, breathing heavy she just escaped
Not wanting to live she says good-bye in hope that she would die
One more cut to try, but she drops the knife and crys
Asking god to take her, to a place she perfers
Now her life is a blur, wishing that nothung occur'd

"What is your life? You are a mist that appears for a little while and then vanishes."
(James 4)




 

Title: Re: Her final words
Post by: Mr. O on August 03, 2005, 10:17:17 PM

That was deep, homie...and bloody ..lol at the end..

Title: Re: Her final words
Post by: hope glimmers on August 04, 2005, 04:18:30 PM

wow.. i dont know if i have any other words in response to this... but wow.

Title: Re: Her final words
Post by: Dreamz on August 04, 2005, 07:06:07 PM

Thanks

Title: Re: Her final words
Post by: Miss NWA Whoorider on August 18, 2005, 01:49:10 PM

very nice could have rapped it a little slower but you get the jist of it right at first.........

I like that,there is like several ways you could take the middle and the end but that was deep man

Title: Re: Her final words
Post by: Dreamz on August 19, 2005, 08:29:53 PM

Thanks

Title: Re: Her final words
Post by: g unot on September 09, 2005, 12:08:46 PM

not bad

Title: Re: Her final words(FEEDBACK)
Post by: Dreamz on December 07, 2005, 06:06:16 AM

yo was up can you guys give me some feed back