Hot new rapping and beats from me, feedback please!!

[On The Edge of Insanity]

After a long time out, I decided to record the start of a new song with me rapping, about the current state of the hiphop game. It isn't completed, but i've put up some audio of the first verse dissing Murda Inc just to get some feedback from you, cause my rapping style has changed a bit since last time you probably heard me. This can be downloaded here:

http://www.dorringtons.freeserve.co.uk/murdainc.rm

Also I have been working on some new beats recently, and a sample of three of these beats can be downloaded from:

http://www.dorringtons.freeserve.co.uk/beatstogether2.rm

Please leave feedback on these beats as well.

Thanks for your time.

[//:in-DIJI-nouz..]

HAHAHAHAHAHA! I'm sorry i had to laugh tho ... i can just picture you sittin' in your room flowin' that shit into your computer, a 13 year old little teenager tryin' to act hard and gangster on the other side of the world... i can just picture him in a little british school outfit and a doorag, with a piece of paper in front of him flowin into a little ass computer mic, he actually sound like he whispering shit so no one in his house would hear him.... maybe it's cause i'm faded that i can picture that so vividly and its so hilarious to me, but regardless, its funny as hell. sorry, i hate to be a hater, but you need to take a step back and look and see where the line is between a fan and somone whose involved in the game... you got a little too carried away, stepped over the line, and tried to get involved... your better off a fan ... its aite, you just wasn't cut out for beatmaking thats all... well maybe if you try hard at that u can make some good ones, but i wouldn't count on flowin' AT ALL, not 1 percent ... hell nah, forget about that shit dogg...but like i said, i hate to be a hater, but under the circumstances of this being to damn funny and most of all the fact that i'm toked, i had to say something ... one love!

[//:in-DIJI-nouz..]

its funny cuz u see that picture of that hard ass looking black dude next to his name, then you see that georgeous model all tagged to his name.. u think your getting ready to hear either some grimey ass rapper from new york or sumin' or at least some kinda baller... but nah... after considering all those facts, take another listen to his track and tell me is that not funny?

[On The Edge of Insanity]

Ok man I see what you are saying, but I would just like to point some things out:

1) I'm 17, and I'm from the UK so I am obviously going to have a different accent to an American person.
2) I do have quite a whispy voice anyway, plus the fact that I was using my laptop speakers to record my vocals means that the quality makes it sound worse.
3) Perhaps I don't wanna be a grimey ass rapper from new york or a baller. You ever think of that?

[bez]

I liked the beat to it man but your voice sounds to laid back for that to be a diss.  A diss needs to be ard hitting shit, u gotta be screaming shouting going mad at this record label, truth is you sound like your dissing them after you have just sent them a box of roses.  You sound to low, but never the less still good mate, the lyrics seems ok and it fitting it well with the beat lad.  Keep it up homie.

[Now_Im_Not_Banned]

HAHAHAHAHAHA! I'm sorry i had to laugh tho ... i can just picture you sittin' in your room flowin' that shit into your computer, a 13 year old little teenager tryin' to act hard and gangster on the other side of the world... i can just picture him in a little british school outfit and a doorag, with a piece of paper in front of him flowin into a little ass computer mic, he actually sound like he whispering shit so no one in his house would hear him.... maybe it's cause i'm faded that i can picture that so vividly and its so hilarious to me, but regardless, its funny as hell. sorry, i hate to be a hater, but you need to take a step back and look and see where the line is between a fan and somone whose involved in the game... you got a little too carried away, stepped over the line, and tried to get involved... your better off a fan ... its aite, you just wasn't cut out for beatmaking thats all... well maybe if you try hard at that u can make some good ones, but i wouldn't count on flowin' AT ALL, not 1 percent ... hell nah, forget about that shit dogg...but like i said, i hate to be a hater, but under the circumstances of this being to damn funny and most of all the fact that i'm toked, i had to say something ... one love!

LMAO...Phiasko...What the fuck is your problem...U think you're all hard because you're fuckin with Fata now...NO!...I heard you rap, and trust me, you aint too great either...lolol...What happened to the days when you were cool, when u gave good constructive criticism instead of tryna diss everybody...Go back to Cuba u fuckin dickhead...

[Trizz]

Im faded too and yo LMAO!!!!!
i picture it too but like not a school boy
more of a white british boy with a t shirt that says
"B- boy" in kiwi lime and a red hat backwards
and a gay Lookin adias windbreakers in black
and a pair of pumas LMAO irv gotti would laugh his ass off
and ja rule would have a heart attack from laughing
and on the next murda inc cd they gon have a skit
wit remo and that pastor from "ghetto bapist church"
smoking a Blunt and changing radio stations and one time
that song will come up and the'll crack up laughing and then irv gotti comes in with a fake english boy pretending to be you kidnapped and the'll shoot you up and then smoke n laugh some More LMAO

[Trizz]

in the video he does the hammer in a all
white screen and brake dances LMAO

[On The Edge of Insanity]

Ok so the rapping on this track isn'r exactly great. Now that you've got all that out of your system, can anybody prehaps download the beat snippits file and give me some (constructive) feedback on the beats please?

Feedback will be appreciated.

[//:in-DIJI-nouz..]

Im faded too and yo LMAO!!!!!
i picture it too but like not a school boy
more of a white british boy with a t shirt that says
"B- boy" in kiwi lime and a red hat backwards
and a gay Lookin adias windbreakers in black
and a pair of pumas LMAO irv gotti would laugh his ass off
and ja rule would have a heart attack from laughing
and on the next murda inc cd they gon have a skit
wit remo and that pastor from "ghetto bapist church"
smoking a Blunt and changing radio stations and one time
that song will come up and the'll crack up laughing and then irv gotti comes in with a fake english boy pretending to be you kidnapped and the'll shoot you up and then smoke n laugh some More LMAO

HAHAHAHAHAHAHA! thats some funny shit.... don't you come up with the craziest shit when your high?

Anyways, Logic, my bad, didn't mean to hate, I don't know what I was thinking when I wrote that... I'll check it out later and give you some constructive criticsim on the beat. I can't help you with the rappin'. one!