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Inspectah
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Civil Retribution...
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March 29, 2004, 03:42:51 PM »
One mic....
One heart...
One life...
One start...
One voice...
One soul...
One choice...
A chance to enrole...
Is living a chance, to die as were given life?
At a second glance, do you doubt this girl as your wife?
With your current stance, how does the "power" feel?
Those dirty hands, outline your fate with a signed and sealed.
Consider your options, or do you jump at any given choice?
Do you speak when your outspoken? or silence your voice?
Stand up for yourself? or runaway from your shadow?
Do you face "tradegdy", keep your chin up, or feel sad so?
Feel "love" care for anyone that dont care for you?
Had enough of all emotion, and say that your "thru"?
Ask yourself a question, and be riddled with a result.
Coz your mind thinks an answer, but your heart goes on halt.
Incase you have a change of view, opinion or whatever.
No matter the day, you cant change the weather.
Gotta face your mistakes, and dont make them again.
See where your going wrong, and be real dont pretend.
Accept when you've lost, and dont say "sorry" to end misery.
Waking up from a nightmare, "shit what the hells gotten to me?"
One mic...
One heart...
One life...
One start...
One mind...
One death...
One ryhme...
Holding on for breath...
Should i add my views? values? or keep it shut?
With no money in my pocket, still flipping my luck on a buck.
Whenever im stuck, i turn to whoever needs me the most.
Myself in the mirror, or a vunerable civilian as i lean on this post.
When your told what you expect to hear? do you believe it?
Do you seek vengence over your broken heart and retreive it?
Locate the source, and refuse all knowledge and stay on track.
Or do you face the fact your blind and get stabbed in the back?
The truths cracked, leaked out and now your left to pick up pieces.
Straighting out the reasons, find the shit stirrers and iron out the creases.
You find yourself, you and i, a phrase that you'll live by in the end.
Coz your enemies were closer than you think, kept distant were your friends...
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TiNmaN
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Re:One mic.. One heart... One life... One start...
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March 30, 2004, 02:32:03 PM »
I felt thata one rite there, Str8 up original. Keep droppin.....
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Name may b differnt, but tha HaMMer still haz to b dropped.
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Inspectah
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Re:One mic.. One heart... One life... One start...
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March 30, 2004, 02:42:21 PM »
thnx man. i'll keep dropping dont u worry.. bump..
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bez
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Re:One mic.. One heart... One life... One start...
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March 30, 2004, 04:48:36 PM »
Liked it man. Kind of reminds me how I rhyme, just simple but effective.
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Suffice
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Ain't no motherfuckin' llama!
Re:One mic.. One heart... One life... One start...
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March 31, 2004, 12:36:48 AM »
i loved it man. I love the rhetorical questions and all the emotion you put into this. Flows nicely too. but i gotta say i don't like the "One micc...one heart...one life..." thing. It doesnt match the song, sounds like your'e just trying to be more introspective than needed here, But VERY Dope rhyme. change the title, write yourself another verse, take out the "one mic..." thing, and you have a hit!
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"You only live once, you might as well die now" - Slim Shady (RIP)
kickz_deluxe
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Wurzeln&Flügel
Re:One mic.. One heart... One life... One start...
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March 31, 2004, 05:59:44 AM »
yeah, az bez said a simple but effective scheme at all, think it made everything clear u wanted to say...cant say much bout tha content , i was never in your situations cuz i dont date gurlz...
btw: i dont think this " one mic..." thing wasnt aight, but gotta hear how it would sound in audio
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even a long way gon end once
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I see no changes, all I see is racist faces
misplaced hate makes disgrace to races
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YA CAN'T STOP THA WAVES BUT LEARN TO SURF
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C R U X
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Inspectah
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Re:Civil Retribution...
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March 31, 2004, 06:00:31 AM »
Thanx peeps.. and i'll take your advice.. ima keep the chorus tho.. lol i added a verse and changed the name.. lol bump for more feedback.
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kickz_deluxe
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Wurzeln&Flügel
Re:Civil Retribution...
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March 31, 2004, 06:05:17 AM »
are u goin to post the new verse?
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even a long way gon end once
---------------*----------------
I see no changes, all I see is racist faces
misplaced hate makes disgrace to races
~~~~~~~~~~°~~~~~~~~~~
YA CAN'T STOP THA WAVES BUT LEARN TO SURF
~~~~~~~~~~°~~~~~~~~~~
C R U X
==========
Inspectah
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Re:Civil Retribution...
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March 31, 2004, 06:10:36 AM »
i ave lol.. its below the second "one mic thing.."
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Suffice
Muthafuckin' Don!
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Ain't no motherfuckin' llama!
Re:Civil Retribution...
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March 31, 2004, 01:45:05 PM »
definitely feeling it more now. good job
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"You only live once, you might as well die now" - Slim Shady (RIP)
Inspectah
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Re:Civil Retribution...
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April 01, 2004, 03:38:23 AM »
thanx man.. bump peeps!
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