all in tha game aint anough fa fellony less u bring it all at tha same time like hores/
i crave gore n galore what you got instore what ya laughin fow i bounce you tween tha ceilin n tha floor so/
close ya eyes n feel tha heat rise/
feel two shots enta u at tha same time/
this game is mine youve crossed tha line and ill think yall find that soon yall be lined in chalk/
im makin armys moonwalk n all youw armed with is tough talk/
cheap talk lil mr wannabe talk/
i flaunt all i got in my writin/
you say i aint up ta standards but its you that r all biting ya writin/
i fight fa tha west coast/
n ill boast what we got n what u not/
have yall fagot my shit is hot/

 
kew man thanx im new so i have no god damn ides where ta go lol

to simple and to short for my liking.  But keep it up you can only get better unless your names Ja Rule.

lol!


Take Killuminati's advice. Another tip if your new to this shit is to try and keep the subjects of your rhymes fresh and interesting.. and dont rap about money and hoes if u aint got em.. be real

peace