somthing i wrote real quic, not done but i like it

[essfive]

sorry its not formatted for vieiwng but its here, its regarding the death of my mother which i witnessed

Ima spit some verses
Lemme tell bout that feelin  I had when I saw them hearses,
All black Riding past and what makes it worse IS,
All I could see was memories and goodtimes cursive

Now im abrasive
, Feelings I have are locked in side yo my brain is wasted,
Depression and hell shit I know i have tasted,
Im acting out anger spells don’t worry its all in haste kid


Nightmares in the night
, Images of her fighting her final fight,
Like I saw her see the final light,
Pitch-black boom like dynamite
Even though it’s hard to think I think I might,

Just slow down a second,
Death is only a passing , or so its been reckoned
you know i never really thought about it
or thought it was true,
blackout light gone , one light shone! pickup get up life goes on, got problems out to the suburbs way back to the street , feelings dry multiply the grief cryin in ma seat,

any good?

[Reef]

That was a real deepset of verses. They came off tight and seemed to get alotta your thoughts and feelings off ya chest.. I liked it..

And im real sorry bout ur Mom and the fact that you had to witness something terrible like that..

Peace

[GrewSum]

wow essfive, i like it

anything where someone can pour that many emotions into words gets my respect 125%. i liked the flow as well, i'd quote the parts i liked, but the wwhole thing was on point.

stay up dunny, we all go threw some wicked shit in life, just makes us stronger....nahmean

[M Dogg™]

Dude, that was crazy. *Can't get it out my head* LOL

For reals though, that was some krazy shit. Nice though, it all gets better in the end, trust me on that.

[bLaDe]

that was deep DogG...feelin it...keep yo head up, peace

 -{bLaDe}