It's May 25, 2024, 06:06:56 AM
Nice piece, tom. I can feel the honesty in that verse. Keep it up... I was just playin' in the other thread but I had to say something. You should honestly work on being less cliche though... and this verse is an example of what you can be if you cut back on cliches.
this may not be filled wit muti's an shit but it is tha realest thing i feel i have written, its a verse from a song i wrote. Its tha third verse an pretty much sums it up, i wrote this like a month or 2 agoim so fuckin alone//every fuckin guy got a girl to bone//am i aint even got one to talk to on tha phone//i forced to resort to stalkin//cuz im so affraid of talkin//its that feelin of rejection//cuz its already inside of me like an infection//im so used to that feelin//it comes natural like a hustler wheelin an dealin//i used to always get dissed//shit would jus get me more pissed//figured i jus never say another word//while my mind goes crazy like a wild buffalo herd//i had a lot of friends//thought we were down to no ends//but they used me like a cheap prosistute//cuz in reality they fakes like lawyers in suits//maybe id feel better if i had a shorty//me an her gettin hella naughty//but instead i got no1//it truly aint no fun cuz tom aint gettin none//i'll be alone on prom night//so i blur my sight//take another hit of seis//all i want is a girl to impress//acheieve infinte sucess//but this life is like a giant game of chess//an one wrong move an its over//an thus far looks like ive made every wrong move
LOL-you already are a loser.Its sweet to be king..Your names tom/and i had sex with your mom--GET ME