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Rate my lyric plz
« on: January 07, 2002, 04:57:29 AM »
i was bored at work 2day and i wrote this, i aint finished it yet but i just wanna c wot u think of it.


me on the mic an Dre on the beats
A combanation like that u kno u cant compete
But if u try nigga, U kno im ready 2 meet
In a studio or live arena,
I’ll tear a sucka apart u never seen-a,
Better MC in this game of hip hop,
U kno my lyrics get crazy wen the bass drop
Mentally, u feel kinda strong,
But wen u get on the mic ur flows spittin wrong,
That’s the curse of a lyrical witchdoctor
I bust one verse and ur tongues tied 2 knots-a
I stand in front of the crowd with a microphone,
Funky music like this u’ll never dance alone,
But if u do, just turn up the bass line,
Infectious grooves like this make people inclined
To get off their ass and hit the dance floor,
An wen my set is over they wanna encore
Im the man they call the Rayza,
I hav my way with a hoe but never pays her
All on my nutsack suckin like a vacuum,
Cant get em both in her mouth, there just aint room,
Violence, is not the answer,
Brings a fatality rate higher then cancer,
« Last Edit: December 31, 1969, 04:00:00 PM by 1034398800 »
 

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Re: Rate my lyric plz
« Reply #1 on: January 07, 2002, 05:45:47 AM »
tight shit homie,  keep it up

peace
« Last Edit: December 31, 1969, 04:00:00 PM by 1034398800 »
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Re: Rate my lyric plz
« Reply #2 on: January 07, 2002, 09:47:53 PM »
Thanks CeeRide, here the full lyric:

Me on the mic an Dre on the beats
A combination like that u know u cant compete
But if u try nigga, U know i'm ready 2 meet
In a studio or live arena,
I’ll tear a sucka apart u never seen-a,
Better MC in this game of hip hop,
U know my lyrics get crazy when the bass drop
Mentally, u feel kinda strong,
But when u get on the mic ur flows spittin wrong,
That’s the curse of a lyrical witchdoctor
I bust one verse and ur tongues tied 2 knots-a
I stand in front of the crowd with a microphone,
Funky music like this u’ll never dance alone,
But if u do, just turn up the bass line,
Infectious grooves like this make people inclined
To get off their ass and jump on the dance floor,
An when my set is over they wanna encore
I’m the man they call the Rayza,
I have my way with a hoe but never pays her
All on my nutsack suckin like a vacuum,
Can’t get em both in her mouth, there just aint room,
Violence, is not the answer,
Brings a fatality rate higher then cancer,
Deadly, like a bitch with a gun,
She’s on her period u better run
She’ll unload a full clip in ur direction
I hope ur strapped homes, 4 ur protection
Bullets burn flesh like a viral infection
And the remedy, lead injections
« Last Edit: December 31, 1969, 04:00:00 PM by 1034398800 »
 

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Re: Rate my lyric plz
« Reply #3 on: January 10, 2002, 01:52:18 AM »
This verse got iller with every bar... much better second half then first..

Illest Bars:
Violence, is not the answer,
Brings a fatality rate higher then cancer,

that's real.. keep spittin.. and blessin the board
« Last Edit: December 31, 1969, 04:00:00 PM by 1034398800 »
 

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Re: Rate my lyric plz
« Reply #4 on: January 10, 2002, 01:58:33 AM »
Thanx infinite  ;D

Im gonna go an enter the newbie battle comp now!
« Last Edit: December 31, 1969, 04:00:00 PM by 1034398800 »