Author Topic: ~An Unborn Childs Untold Story~ (Read 155 times)

Fatal619 · « **on:** October 23, 2002, 08:01:00 AM »

not a flow just some poetry this particular one is published had a bit of contreversy in the beginning because in a way it dealt with abortion, u could say. but nonetheless here peep it for ya self:

It's just a world of animosity don't make me come out
I'm a product of a rape, my mother doesn't want me, and my father bailed fatherhoods route
why punish me and send me into a world that's unforgiving
I haven't even sinned yet, I haven't even started living
so how do I deserve this? I think it's unjust
don't make me go out there it's just a world of mistrust
I'll hold my breath,
tie the cord around my neck
I'd rather deal with death than live the rest of my life an emotional wreck

Kill · « **Reply #1 on:** October 23, 2002, 08:13:01 AM »

really deals with a controversial subject...since the rhymes ain't too important here I really liked it...nice shit, keep it up

bez · « **Reply #2 on:** October 23, 2002, 11:37:34 AM »

as you said yourself more of a poem but it was cool

Reef · « **Reply #3 on:** October 23, 2002, 02:58:39 PM »

Yeah.. Like you said more of a poem.. and it was a contraversial subject.. But a fresh subject.. I liked the way you expressed it but its a shame it wasnt longer..

Fatal619 · « **Reply #4 on:** October 23, 2002, 10:23:18 PM »

yeah it's a concept i'm going to work on the album. This was a poem i used for a short poetry contest at first they didnt' want to enter this poem but at the end this poem along with a few more got me nominated at the National Poet of the Year Convention in Anaheim but i got a track to finish i'll try and get on that Unborn Story