Keystyle Feedback please

[ILLPrOpHeCy]

right i wanna get u ppl to kno my name and my style of flowing so im gonna try make this shit tight even with a hangover

The lies control my mind got me wide like this
With a crooked eye twitch from all the grooves in my system
My Click'll represent daily thats mandatory
We paid our dues in this Bitches abusin this
Ya bruised in this MCs meet defeat
Yall switch tell me why shit goes down like this
Everyday I stalk the streets gotta pack my 45th
Why do I? Thats the crew I gets down
Half my peeps either dead or on lock down
Domes get bashed G's get caught up its path
Eminem says only have one homie fuck it have a crew
ones who aint fonie.
Ive got he realest immortal mind
So keep protectin while Im disconnectin
Interceptin be connectin disrespectin neglectin
Perfectin many ways, increase slaves to my rhythm
How can you be down? Create a sound to be with me
Tryin bitin not one dimension
Who saw and did shit? Heard they gave info quick
The immortal nimrod neutral but if I have to Ill shoot you
Reduce two shells leave ya body layin where you dwell
Shape shiftin plans the prophecy grant the immortal mind
Mecca gets slow shine thats what you do now its my time
My intention is determined that this beat you cant delete
Quick Bring Da Crew we'll wiz randomly
Buds pass the wave peace to Smooth locked away
Healthy phantoms to boogie lets all pave the way
Selfish ones I told you "Do you dare interfere?"

1.Smooth is my uncle whos in jail
i kno its abit played out in places n lackin with rythem here n there but im jus getting used 2 keystyling feedbak plz~

[Koncept]

Everyday I stalk the streets gotta pack my 45th

[@Ss@sSiN]

Smooth is my uncle whos in jail