My First Write Up

[Storm]

Give me some feedback please...

Lyrical tactics make my rhymes classic, jurassic/
I stay on top like an attic/
I’ve had it…of whack niggaz who try to start static/
don’t know im more dangerous than acrobatics with this automatic (BANG!)/
shit I do drugs but I aint no motherfuckin addict/
I’m an alcoholic, call it what you wanna call it/
I got a gun slut, Empty out your wallet, all of it/
Now let me back it up now and introduce my name/
I’m that motherfucker Storm takin over this game/
I’m not in it for the cash, im in it for the fame/
Getting tired of all yall rappin bout the same thangs/
shits lame, but I don’t blame/
I just claim…that im the best…so don’t contest/
Or else you’ll need to wear a vest/
So I suggest…yall settle for less, admit that im blessed/
And let your motherfuckin mouth rest…

[abstruse]

Good Job if its your first write up. Keep dropping.

[T.J.]

I’m an alcoholic, call it what you wanna call it/

heehee..... xzibit
besides that, not bad for a first spit.

[Slim-x]

It Was Cool But Ta Me It Sounded Like Eminem.........

[Proph aka ..::Konztrukt::..]

aight shit dogg keep droppin