what do think about that ?

[Janni]

there's a thin line between all things you see
your friends your dogs and your family
Your street your hood your whole city
Your state your fate and even your country.
 
brother listen ,please believe in me
there were so many things you couldn't do, hear or see
but one day all things come together and we'll all be free
the whole world united , one big family

there's a thin line between all things you see
between the one who's lost and the one who succeed
but one day there'll be only god judging you
knowing all the things you've done and you'll do

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I know it's not good, but english isn'T the language i speak best

[kickz_deluxe]

first of all: i understood whut u wanted to express. i think u should choose another wordz to make it sound more difficult..i dont know how to explain it but i should do tha same with ma writtenz... when i read i thought u wrote it for tupacs hail mary beat. the flow just rembered...
now try to find anuther wordz n it gon be a promisin piece!

by tha way: where u from?
english aint my motherlanguage too...

[*Z* - The Queen of Dubcc]

hu?
i think it wasnt all good, kickz is right, u should write some complex shit!
but i think thats yo first time, aint it?
so it wasnt all bad too!
yes where r u from?
r u female?
i am.........peace

[Janni]

I'm german  

i only write in german.
This was my first time i did something in english.
Got to practice some more.

@ wincedspell : no i am male

[kickz_deluxe]

u r german?

whutz your hometown? r u from berlin???munic???
north, south, east, west???

i know alot bout germany, u can believe me...

[Janni]

I'm from Bremen
But i'm spendin the most of my free time in Hamburg.
Nothern germany is quite nice.  
Do you went to germany ?

[kickz_deluxe]

bremen.....aigh
i visited bremen one time...how old are u?

[*Z* - The Queen of Dubcc]

all right!

peace, man!

[Janni]

18 years. How old are you ?
What do you think about Bremen?

[kickz_deluxe]

oh...im a few years younger

whutever.
i was about five years when i visited bremen so i cant remember that much. anyhow, i just saw any "boring" sightz,like churches n alla  that. but tha north of germany iz quite cool. in north u can feel free, itz so much better than germanys south,aint it?

[Janni]

I think the most people in nothern germany are open minded.
I cant say that about some Politicans from the south.
But southern germany has a nice country side.
Nothern germany is so flat.
 But you can have a lot of fun here.
And we have good hip hop in nothern germany.
That's my opinion.But there's good Hiphop in the rest of germany too.
They all have good songs.
There are all kinds of hip hop in germany.

[kickz_deluxe]

yes, i think people outta tha south are less openminded than peepz in north cuz therez a lotta traditional stuff, ya know alla that baveria things.
ferris mc is from bremen, aint he?
do u live in tha center or in blocks around tha city?

[*Z* - The Queen of Dubcc]

aha, all interesting! :)
i would get some mind to but i have no time now!
imma look sooner what u about!

[*Z* - The Queen of Dubcc]

i have neva been in bremen, or what u talkin bout! but in da south of germany!
thats pretty shitty! :D
cu!

['Illicit']

considering this your first attempt in writing in english it was acceptable.   now as far as the open-minded thing goes. the north might be open minded but down here in Hessen (where I live) we are all but not open minded lol.