Author Topic: My DePrezzion (Read 138 times)

Dreamz · « **on:** March 23, 2004, 07:16:15 PM »

I live in a broken home torn apart feelings//
No matter what I say there is no family healing//
I'm in a deep sleep dreaming about my life//
At timez I wish I could end it with a slice of the knife//
but I'll trust in my friends because they can help more//
No teachers can change me so I walk out the door//
No guns in my life so I drink my life to the gutter//
My DePrezzion makes my life and feeling all flutter//
I wish my elders told me my story of the way around//
But the DePrezzion needs to find me...it found//

It simple and kinda confuesing but I'm pissed at some people so I wrote whatever came to my mind

Inspectah · « **Reply #1 on:** March 24, 2004, 08:28:01 AM »

Props. All the small verses, and whatever feeling you put into them always comes out, no matter about feedback you jus' feel that little bit better.. Props man!

Suffice · « **Reply #2 on:** March 24, 2004, 02:37:39 PM »

i'm definitely feeling what u got to say, but try rhyming more than just couplets, it seems a little too simplet this way. not that i'm a God MC either, i'm just giiving a tip

Dreamz · « **Reply #3 on:** March 24, 2004, 03:36:33 PM »

yo thanks for the tip

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