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first half was real good, only thing i would change is the line were it says ..... just wack it kinda sounds like your talking about your own rhymes. and try to make the last part flow a little better. Thats just my opinion so don't let it phase u, keep writin and doin your thing
Quote from: wilz on January 12, 2006, 05:22:02 PMfirst half was real good, only thing i would change is the line were it says ..... just wack it kinda sounds like your talking about your own rhymes. and try to make the last part flow a little better. Thats just my opinion so don't let it phase u, keep writin and doin your thingThanks for the comment!You're right with the "just wack" thing @eKardz: Your comment didn't help me at all Any tips for me to improve in general???
HAA dmx nigga u wack, that was the wackest verse i ever seen in my LIFE, All these cats kno, u jus a fake ass mufuka wit throw-way simplistic rhymes. im bouts to RIP this nigga.When im Slammin you ill be makin the the Whole Planet Movelaugh as the crowd watchs me manhandle and Dismantle YouThats what u get for thinkin an' Planning That Dynamic Loseleave you lookin like a Left handed man usin a Right-handed ToolAn when u Go back Broken an Bruised and lie to ur Fans and Crewthey all Gunna Sceptically Examine You and they gunna Demand the ProofAn ill show them the K.O. an how i Land it too in every Camera ViewLeave You to Rot, like those skinny Ethiopians Goin through a Famine DoLock u in a Panic-room and under the bandaged-wounds watch the Maggots ChewThe room so Stank i Puke, leave ur Decaying carcass smellin like Salmon Stu,I'll Erupt Spittin Volcanic Ooze, Cremate ur Body to Nothin but Sand and FumesGEA.. say somethin'DYNAMIC