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Just some shit i wrote in school today,.. check
« on: September 25, 2002, 08:02:35 AM »
first i wanna say, ive neva eva wrote anything so this isnt no good shit, i was bored and thought id write some shit
what yall think? its not like the lyrical vocab or anythin that matters its more the subject.. so check it


Im just sittin' here at school, bored as fuck
I wish the bell would ring, but damn, no luck
All the people in my class only listen to rock
Aint no homie on my block listenin to HipHop
Only place where I can go to talk about music
Is the internet, for real though, ain't that amusing?
When I chat with the homies from the WCC forum
I wish i could be at there place and talk directly to 'um
Many people think Im just a lil bit sick
But im just a dude who loves bumpin' his music
I cant go a day without listenin' to rap
What the hell? Should i be listenin' to this Nsync crap?
Leave me alone, i wanna go home and talk to Jome
Ask him about Xzibit or Doggy bout the newest Bone,
Nowadays when you ask people about hiphop
They tell you Nelly or Ja Rule but that shit is not!
Never heard DPG or the D O to the C,
Westcoast Hiphop is for them S N double O P.
And I am sick of it, I wanna listen to my E-40
Without my parents tellin me, Nima are you crazy??
I once had a couple homies who listened to my shit,
But now they all about Korn or also Limp Bizkit
Fuck it! I tried but it just aint my style,
Can you believe I tried to chill to SlipKnot for a while?
Thats a shady thought and now when my homie comes through
With Marilyn Manson I was fuck you man you dont have a clue!
At least the girls nowadays dont listen to pop
They bump some Aaliyah, Eve or some Nate Dogg
And thats still better than Metal or Punk rock.
I ain't tryin' to hate but its gotta be told,
You're never on TV unless your last shit went gold
To breakthrough, outta the blue and without a clue
The only way is to hook up with some rich Jew
Who'll put you on a track with a famous singer like J Lo,
To get you heard, but dude what about your flow?
But this is how the business nowadays goes,
Full of hows who's bank account steadily grows,
And I cant change it so I guess i gotta face it,
But for now I say PEACE and don't forget the Hair Grease!
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Re: Just some shit i wrote in school today,.. chec
« Reply #1 on: September 25, 2002, 08:11:19 AM »
it was mad dope especially considering this was your 1st rhyme,  u should write more often
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Re: Just some shit i wrote in school today,.. chec
« Reply #2 on: September 25, 2002, 08:11:59 AM »
When will this SONG be released ???  ;D
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Re: Just some shit i wrote in school today,.. chec
« Reply #3 on: September 25, 2002, 08:38:15 AM »
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first i wanna say, ive neva eva wrote anything so this isnt no good shit, i was bored and thought id write some shit
what yall think? its not like the lyrical vocab or anythin that matters its more the subject.. so check it


Im just sittin' here at school, bored as fuck
I wish the bell would ring, but damn, no luck
All the people in my class only listen to rock
Aint no homie on my block listenin to HipHop
Only place where I can go to talk about music
Is the internet, for real though, ain't that amusing?
When I chat with the homies from the WCC forum
I wish i could be at there place and talk directly to 'um
Many people think Im just a lil bit sick
But im just a dude who loves bumpin' his music
I cant go a day without listenin' to rap
What the hell? Should i be listenin' to this Nsync crap?
Leave me alone, i wanna go home and talk to Jome
Ask him about Xzibit or Doggy bout the newest Bone,
Nowadays when you ask people about hiphop
They tell you Nelly or Ja Rule but that shit is not!
Never heard DPG or the D O to the C,
Westcoast Hiphop is for them S N double O P.
And I am sick of it, I wanna listen to my E-40
Without my parents tellin me, Nima are you crazy??
I once had a couple homies who listened to my shit,
But now they all about Korn or also Limp Bizkit
Fuck it! I tried but it just aint my style,
Can you believe I tried to chill to SlipKnot for a while?
Thats a shady thought and now when my homie comes through
With Marilyn Manson I was fuck you man you dont have a clue!
At least the girls nowadays dont listen to pop
They bump some Aaliyah, Eve or some Nate Dogg
And thats still better than Metal or Punk rock.
I ain't tryin' to hate but its gotta be told,
You're never on TV unless your last shit went gold
To breakthrough, outta the blue and without a clue
The only way is to hook up with some rich Jew
Who'll put you on a track with a famous singer like J Lo,
To get you heard, but dude what about your flow?
But this is how the business nowadays goes,
Full of hows who's bank account steadily grows,
And I cant change it so I guess i gotta face it,
But for now I say PEACE and don't forget the Hair Grease!



Man...that was pretty tight considering it was your first rhyme.  And it wasnt on sum BS topic either, i felt it from the first bar to the last, im in the same situation yo... keep writing, jus keep expressin yo feelings n views on things...you got talent, peace

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Re: Just some shit i wrote in school today,.. chec
« Reply #4 on: September 25, 2002, 08:46:16 AM »
Good topic there. It had a nice flow, and since this is your first rhyme, that's a great way to start. Who knows, keep dropping and lets see how much you can improve.
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Re: Just some shit i wrote in school today,.. chec
« Reply #5 on: September 25, 2002, 11:00:42 AM »
thats great mate, fantastic.
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Re: Just some shit i wrote in school today,.. chec
« Reply #6 on: September 25, 2002, 11:10:34 AM »
This was okay for a first time attempt..your vocabulary is simple try uppin it a bit..also you need metas and multies to improve it more...other then taht it was okay! good job pal! ;D
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Re: Just some shit i wrote in school today,.. chec
« Reply #7 on: September 25, 2002, 06:55:07 PM »
yea dog pretty nice, u should go up in the keystyle battle board threads and call some 1 out....shit....u might even win
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Re: Just some shit i wrote in school today,.. chec
« Reply #8 on: September 25, 2002, 07:25:23 PM »
Hey.....dats hard rite there, Reflectin on shit and tellin a story is da hardest in writin songs, ESPECIALLY 4 a rookie.....much props.






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Re: Just some shit i wrote in school today,.. chec
« Reply #9 on: September 26, 2002, 04:49:44 AM »
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You're never on TV unless your last shit went gold


Big Nima the Lyrical Gangsta!  Droppin mad knowledge on em.  I totally know how you feel.  Most of my "face to face" (non internet homies) flip flop on this music like flap jacks.  One minute this is hot.. next minute that'z hot.. Only my Inet-G'z feel the West like I do which is propz!  

That alone should show you how small and "tight knit" our little group of Dub CC fans are.  We are considered by most.. very different from the "norm.." which makes us all the same.  Respect that!

Good post homie.

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Re: Just some shit i wrote in school today,.. chec
« Reply #10 on: September 26, 2002, 04:51:26 AM »
thanks ya'll i appreciate your feedback!
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Re: Just some shit i wrote in school today,.. chec
« Reply #11 on: September 26, 2002, 07:35:57 AM »
lol, Nima posts his first verse and u see homies givin feedback that never even seem to peep the keystyle section...really felt this, work on the rhymes but keep it up, very nice shit considerin it was ur 1st rhyme
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Re: Just some shit i wrote in school today,.. chec
« Reply #12 on: September 26, 2002, 07:44:35 AM »
Yo.. tight for your first rhyme  keep it up
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Re: Just some shit i wrote in school today,.. chec
« Reply #13 on: September 26, 2002, 07:50:04 AM »
Props Nima, very dope verse
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Re: Just some shit i wrote in school today,.. chec
« Reply #14 on: September 26, 2002, 08:02:01 AM »
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lol, Nima posts his first verse and u see homies givin feedback that never even seem to peep the keystyle section


whats that supposed to mean? :-P
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