a perfect circle-just to let cats know I'm still workin'

[Tanjential]

Last time I sat with a friend
I looked him in the eyes and said it happened again
“what happened?” he said with concern in his eyes
I’m sparkin’ when we talkin’, so we’re burnin’ it…”Right..”
I said, ‘when I looked at you or the next man, you were all just concentrations of energy…fast moving molecules,hot atoms
All the fools gawk at ‘em
when they see it, it’s the truth
My eyes were just fast enough
to start catchin’ up
To the concentration of physical systems
I felt in touch with life’s centrifugal rhythms
I realized God’s a passionate artists
and he’s passin’ it on us
Honest
the world is what the world is
and it’s a glorious painting for us to see
So often we don’t see the craft of science amidst our California bustling
It’s nuts to me
but I see
magic is science, it’s all interrelated
And creating this world can’t be imitated
The earth is a proton circling a nucleus
Men are protons circling women, you new to this?
Women are protons circling powerful men
Gays are protons circling culture’s awareness, who’s flowerful then?
Stoners are protons circling California
Where the herb is mo’ bomb protons circling la cosa nostra
On the coast of mosta us, circling the beach
With purple in our reach
it’s serving us in each
And every day a different way to say hey
is there yay in this hay or is it from the bay cause this shit is way
Too dank
two tanks are metaphors for biblical giants
that came to stack bodies in cities being defiant
like Sodom and Gomorra
 saw ‘em at the bottom of the door
shortly before they became more bodies on the floor
California
is the holy garden, most regarded
desirable place to be. Like John Steinbeck, said around migrating season
when his family had to go east of Eden
Before the weeks of treason
when God said “You grew apples,
So now you gotta onward ramble
hit the big apple and make electricity out of candles”
That’s why liberal people went there and made sad art
God had to show ‘em what was up and since they’ve had hard
Times. Every angel has a price to pay for wings
And even in Eden now we pay everyday for things
Because by the time we made it back
God wasn’t just okay with taking us cats
Back into the proverbial womb
and start servin’ with spoons
Every person bites an apple and spits a seed that plants
Into an idea that hurts a child’s innocence but helps a man advance
Often the happenstance
will in an instant instance issue me a disease
Cause I can’t help but feel sometimes that the not-innocence is a disease
Visually,
Jesus walks through out our consciousness
Every helicopter view of human accomplishment
Doesn’t take away individual credit
But it takes more than one person to send humanity a message
 no one person said it
It’s not that simple it’s a spirit
 that lives in all of us and its personification
Isn’t a simple dude we can always be facin’
it ain’t like that, any one worth finding doesn’t have an address
for you assheads
to be asking
for money and autographs waiting on the big guy’s back steps
The fact is
 everything is one and though it sounds like we sail hectic seas
We are all consciousness experiencing itself subjectively
The rest will see
God’s a huge art fan
That’s why he starts man
Woman, mankind
And seemingly
Damned minds
that observe all creation from
land mines
to sand pines
Last time
I sat with a friend….


-T

[QuietTruth]

Every person bites an apple and spits a seed that plants
Into an idea that hurts a child’s innocence but helps a man advance

Visually, Jesus walks through out our consciousness
Every helicopter view of human accomplishment
Doesn’t take away individual credit
But it takes more than one person to send humanity a message

Nice. Them lines was just fuckin' nice.

Big ass vocab too. Always good. All ya'll who Keystyle on here got a good vocab, damn.

Good shit man!

[Sanford - V. President of the Dangerous Crew Movement]

alter the sentence structure a bit to make it flow a little better.  other than that, great potential man!   

[Tanjential]

alter the sentence structure a bit to make it flow a little better.  other than that, great potential man!   

i have a fast flow, so when performed it sounds right, that's the exact reason i don't post most of my stuff in keystyle. but when i got the audio how I like it(of all the songs I'm working on) I'll get at the audio board for sure.


thanks for your comments +1


-T

[Tanjential]

oh and I spaced it the way I did in the post so all the rhymes were obvious. i try to to embed alot of rhymes within lines.

-T

[Tanjential]

here is the original structure

Last time I sat with a friend
I looked him in the eyes and said it happened again
“what happened?” he said with concern in his eyes
I’m sparkin’ when we talkin’, so we’re burnin’ it…”Right..”
I said, ‘when I looked at you or the next man, you were all just concentrations of energy…fast moving molecules,hot atoms
All the fools gawk at ‘em when they see it, it’s the truth
My eyes were just fast enough to start catchin’ up
To the concentration of physical systems
I felt in touch with life’s centrifugal rhythms
I realized God’s a passionate artists and he’s passin’ it on us
Honest, the world is what the world is and it’s a glorious painting for us to see
So often we don’t see the craft of science amidst our California bustling
It’s nuts to me, but I see magic is science, it’s all interrelated
And creating this world can’t be imitated
The earth is a proton circling a nucleus
Men are protons circling women, you new to this?
Women are protons circling powerful men
Gays are protons circling culture’s awareness, who’s flowerful then?
Stoners are protons circling California
Where the herb is mo’ bomb protons circling la cosa nostra
On the coast of mosta us, circling the beach
With purple in our reach, it’s serving us in each
And every day a different way to say hey, is there yay in this hay cause this shit is way
Too dank, two tanks are metaphors for biblical giants
that came to stack bodies in cities being defiant
like Sodom and Gomorra, saw ‘em at the bottom of the door
shortly before they became more bodies on the floor
California is the holy garden, most regarded desirable place to be
Like John Steinbeck, said around migrating season
when his family had to go east of Eden
Before the weeks of treason when God said “You grew apples,
So now you gotta onward ramble, hit the big apple and make electricity out of candles”
That’s why liberal people went there and made sad art
God had to show ‘em what was up and since they’ve had hard times
Every angel has a price to pay for wings
And even in Eden now we pay everyday for things
Because by the time we made it back, God wasn’t just okay with taking us cats
Back into the proverbial womb and start servin’ with spoons
Every person bites an apple and spits a seed that plants
Into an idea that hurts a child’s innocence but helps a man advance
Often the happenstance will in an instant instance issue me a disease
Cause I can’t help but feel sometimes that the not-innocence is a disease
Visually, Jesus walks through out our consciousness
Every helicopter view of human accomplishment
Doesn’t take away individual credit
But it takes more than one person to send humanity a message, no one person said it
It’s not that simple it’s a spirit, that lives in all of us and its personification
Isn’t a simple dude we can always be facin,
it ain’t like that, any one worth finding doesn’t have an address
for you assheads
to be asking for money and autographs waiting on the big guy’s back steps
The fact is, everything is one and though it sounds like we sail hectic seas
We are all consciousness experiencing itself subjectively
The rest will see
God’s a huge art fan
That’s why he starts man
Woman, mankind
And seemingly
Damned minds that observe all creation from land mines to sand pines

i think it flows better and this is closer to how I actually flow it^
-T

[QuietTruth]

When you get the audio, post up.