Lyrical Confusion (aka amzing) check this shit

[So Much Style]

Lyrical confusion
This was somethin i just wrote messing around, its not easy to do, actually i think it is EXTREMELY dope..please rate this, i know its not the keystyle forum but i want some of u other to see it..

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   my mind causes lyrical confusion/
   creating illisions/ no solutions/
   rhyme prosititution/ thats what im usin/
   to sell records/ faster than a lepord/
   peppered/ spotted like some checkers/
  your bitch is wetter/ suckin on my nector/
  but i can do better/ elector and representer/
  Narrator is chosen/boastin kknowin i'll be/
  writing a masterpeace/ watch the records increse/
  deseased, the crease please leave/
  i got some tricks up my sleeve/ so relieve everyone in my belief/
  when i rhyme, i shine/ enuf to make u go blind/ every line/
  creatin lyrical crime/ fuck a 9 i drop signs to show u its mine/
  and if i dont tell/ i'll show/
  hit below/the elbow/ u know/ its fatal/
  fatal chances advanced to enhancedments i ran this/
  on any planet/granted i am hit/i be screamin god damnit/cause im demandin/
  and what i demend is what i open/im hopin/got u crokin and chockin/hot box smokin/
  so i hope u come lyrically prepared/be scared/i declared and faired to swear/
  on this rhyme itself/keebler elfs in the shelfs/tell/its bad for your health/
  like a  ray of ultra violet/i high but not there yet/i get/redirect to everybody left/
  im in the atmosphere/sms in the dope gear/flyest thing to come out this year/
  i will i promise/like nastrodamus/i taunt this/im on this/ like igaunas/
  and lake moss/and frost/its lost/like crop/
  circles/fulla purple/geeky urkel/ure wack, dont wanna get hit so u wear a snorkel/
  around town/up down and around/i found/the mound/right about now/
  causin likwidation/temptation/lyrical incarseration/what ure facin/
  im like nicolas cage amillion faces/embrace this/but stay scritcly no hatas/
  ure a phony/no homie/ya know me/og/vocally unholy/
  so u get a lyrical check/in the neck/your voice box has been wrecked/with my dialect/
  and metaphors/finish my chores/than scorn the vocal cords/
  on my microphone/cause im home alone/just a homophone/ready to grab the chrome/
  and thats all im about/i shout/im out like the dogg house/
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[So Much Style]

fuck u.

[AlerG]

like hey diggy what's the dealy with the new cracks you been done said, huh.

[Trauma-san]

It's Aight, Some Of It Is Tight, Some Is Kinda Wack...

The WAck Parts Would Be

fatal chances advanced to enhancedments i ran this/
 on any planet/granted i am hit/i be screamin god damnit/cause im demandin/
 and what i demend is what i open/im hopin/got u crokin and chockin/hot box smokin/
 so i hope u come lyrically prepared/be scared/i declared and faired to swear/
 on this rhyme itself/keebler elfs in the shelfs/tell/its bad for your health/
 like a  ray of ultra violet/i high but not there yet/i get/redirect to everybody left/
 im in the atmosphere/sms in the dope gear/flyest thing to come out this year/
 i will i promise/like nastrodamus/i taunt this/im on this/ like igaunas/
 and lake moss/and frost/its lost/like crop/
 circles/fulla purple/geeky urkel/ure wack, dont wanna get hit so u wear a snorkel/

That Just Don't Make Any Sense, And It's Not On Topic.  You're Getting Better, Though...

Peace

[So Much Style]

yeah it has no story at all..its just a bunch of lyrics thrown together to flow....

and alerg what are u talking about?

[Now_Im_Not_Banned]

Tell me what yall think of this one? I did it in 5 mins in class...It's kinda whack, I tried a new style...

I bang fags that look like skin heads/I even shoot the ones that been dead/Don’t step if you’re a pin head/Ya betta’ listen to what NIK said/Or I’ll burn you down instead/Ya don’t wanna end up a gimp in bed/Talk shit and you will win led/Or get shot with my Mack 10/Drive By with my Black Benz/And Jam on ya’ll like the Pac 10/And beat ya to all the way back then/I kill fag men/A bad friend/Amazing/‘Brow raising/Blazing/Racing/Neva Chasing/Neva pacing/I stay lacing/Beats/Can’t get beat/Never been defeate/Alwayz blazin like weed/Indeed/No greed/Fuck good deeds/I move ya with my mind like tella conices/Eat MC’s like Reaces Peaces/And Peaches/Hang you on the wall like Jesus/And murda ya whole family, includin ya neices/Use you like leases/Get in ya skin like leaches/Unreal/Real deal/Neva squeal/First meal/Ya betta’ feel/Or get peeled/Killed/Filled/With led/In ya head/Love watchin blood shed/But the colors red/So I dip you in Ice water till ya turn blue/Somethin new/For all of you/Read it through/Or I’ll demolish ya nutz like Mountain Dew/And Squeeze ‘em so hard, make ya scream hoodie hoo/And sell ‘em for CREAM like The Wu/“A muthafucka sayin bye 2 you”

[Smooth]

Yo Now_I_Know that rhyme was DOPE hommie

[Now_Im_Not_Banned]

Thanks...

[Sikotic™]

I bang fags that look like skin heads

I know what you meant but that line looks funny by itself. LOL

Nice rhyme man.

[Now_Im_Not_Banned]

LOL...I mean Bang Bang, not Howard Stern Bang..LOL