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Lil Geezy
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Just a battle verse....leave feedback please
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June 29, 2002, 10:13:59 AM »
Right......here's a battle verse from d12online and I want feedback from real MC'S cuz most of the people over there suck.
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Ah shit, I know this ain't gonna go down. You two of all people? Dissin me?
You gotta be shittin me…I’ve seen better comebacks in porno videos
I ain't lettin you bitches slide no more…check it out
Yo….Now what in the fuck do we have
here
besides two illiterate
queers
I tried to be
sincere
and handle my business but this shits gotten too
severe
I'm the forum
pioneer
, my whole
career
I've
persevered
without sheddin any
tears
Stev-e there's a few things your dumbass needs to
hear
before I make you
disappear
I think you betta look in the
mirror
and realize you're being ripped
severe
I still wanna make a few more things
clear
, and yeah I'm being
sincere
YEAH YOU PISSED ME OFF.....GOD I GOTTA GO AGAIN
It's time for me to
regulate
and
simplicate
things down to a matter of
fate
I
desecrate
and
violate
weak MC'S and leave them eradicated and
irate
Complaint
? The only reason I was put on this earth was to
translate
hate
Do you really think you would stand a chance against an MC who defies the
weak
?
Please, you're just gonna add to my winnin
streak
, my
technique
is so
unique
Stev-e don’t even
speak
you
freak
, your just another
weak
computer
geek
Your rhymes are so old and shitty they could be classified as "
antique
"
Shane your rhyming style
reeks
, this fag might as well starred in Dawson’s
creek
NOT DONE YET MOTHERFUCKERS....
I'm tired of fake netcees like you two with no mets or multis thinkin they
hard
What can I say, I've never left my
guard
and I'm never gonna lose to these
retards
My rhymes have the power to make your insides
scarred
without any
regard
Shane I thought you should
know
you’re
below
low
, not anywhere near my
level
The only way you two fags would stand a chance is to sell your soul to the
devil
And even still you’d be
violated
,
desecrated
, and how could I forget?
annihilated
You’ve been tried and
convicted
so there’s no need to leave any statement
unstated
THE FINAL BLOW
I've
waited
and
hated
your type for so long you can only
begin
to
imagine
I could be drunk off a bottle of
gin
and still rip you with a
pen
time and time
again
Don't you two faggots know, envy is a
sin
how in the fuck could you ever
win
?
You living is only
temporary
, shit I wanna see you rhyme without a
dictionary
I'm a lyrical
mercenary
sent to defy the weak,
Scary
? You betta prey to
marry
I’m way
sicker
, My rhymes will fuck you up
quicker
then any type of hard
liquor
Pain is what I
stir
, I met stev-e’s mom today just so I could
confer
and "
dick
her
"
All u see is a
blur
, I
transfer
shit sick enough to make the next renaissance
occur
Battle me? Bitch I simply
defer
, when you battle me you betta be ready for
war
I've got battle verses
galore
, Shane ain't nuttin but a cheap broken down
whore
You two can't even spell
right
, so how the hell could you ever put up a
fight
Despite
tonight
I
ignite
rhymes and make the
polite
inconspicuous just for the
night
You two fags can't see me I'm simply out of
sight
, my name you soon will
recite
You think everything's
alright
? Pain and suffering is the only thing my rhymes
invite
On my level? Haha not
quite
. Don't even flatter yourselves with your bullshit
rhyme
As the don once said, "you can run the red
lights
but read the street
signs
"
I seriously doubt if you two can even read, let along think
straight
When you fuck with me the death
rate
hits a maximum there’s no chance to
escape
I told you two dumbasses before, there’s no way you can
escape
your
fate
......
________________________________________
BATTLE
EXPLANATIONS
-Ste-v and shane started off on this forum beefing. Then all of a sudden they bacame friends.
-SIMPLICATE = to make things simpler
-Shane's rhyming style consists of 1 syllable words with no multis or wordplay
-Dawson's Creek (TV SHOW)
-"You Can Run The Read Lights But Read The Street Signs" In the song "This Aint Livin 2Pac says that. It's a figure of speech meaning you can move as fast as you want but take advice along the line.
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Been getten worried that these square muthafuckers with nerves
sayin they can get with us but picture me gettin' served
My own mama say i'm thuged out
my shit be bumpin out tha record store as if it was a drug house
.:R-E-L:.
Muthafuckin' Don!
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R-E-L...comin w/ that punk rap!
Re: Just a battle verse....leave feedback please
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June 29, 2002, 10:20:12 AM »
thats tite n all.....but 4 a battle......its WAAAAY 2 long!
u gotta shorten it down
its tite....good vocab, and flow
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Lil Geezy
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Re: Just a battle verse....leave feedback please
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June 29, 2002, 10:21:32 AM »
Thanks for the feedback.
Peace
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Been getten worried that these square muthafuckers with nerves
sayin they can get with us but picture me gettin' served
My own mama say i'm thuged out
my shit be bumpin out tha record store as if it was a drug house
.:R-E-L:.
Muthafuckin' Don!
Posts: 1502
Karma: 0
R-E-L...comin w/ that punk rap!
Re: Just a battle verse....leave feedback please
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June 29, 2002, 10:22:47 AM »
49 bars!!!!
thats like double the maximum u wanna go
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Re: Just a battle verse....leave feedback please
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June 29, 2002, 10:26:39 AM »
Yeah, I agree with REL. This shit was tight and ill, but it was way too long for a battle verse. 49 bars? DAMN! I think a person would only use 49 bars if he wanted a guaranteed victory, or wanted to humiliate his opponent. 49? The highest I go is 30, son....
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Lil Geezy
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Re: Just a battle verse....leave feedback please
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June 29, 2002, 10:34:59 AM »
Alright next time I'll shorten it.....thanks for the replies.
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Been getten worried that these square muthafuckers with nerves
sayin they can get with us but picture me gettin' served
My own mama say i'm thuged out
my shit be bumpin out tha record store as if it was a drug house
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Lil Geezy
Posts: 68
Karma: 0
Tha Renegades
Re: Just a battle verse....leave feedback please
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June 29, 2002, 02:13:22 PM »
Shorter one......
_________________________________________________
Haha......you gotta be shittin
me
. Another
wannabe
who thinks they can challenge
me
. Rip
me
? Bitch you can't even touch
me
THE BEGINNING OF THE END.
I hope you
rehearsed
your battle
verse
cuz this
curse
I'm about to
disperse
Your
verse
just got
reversed
, cum is the only thing that satisfies your
thirst
My angers like a bubble it can
burst
, your whole style is simply
unrehearsed
You're simply
screwed
, I
conclude
gay porn is the only thing your life
includes
Your style tastes shitty like health
food
and is nowhere near
rude
or
crude
I
elude
wack MC'S like
you
searchin for a
feud
and leave no battle
reviewed
GET NASTY? WHY THE FUCK NOT
It's just my killin
instinct
, fuck around with me and you'll sure to end up
extinct
No need to spike your
drink
, great MC'S and wack wannabes aren't easily
linked
If you
insist
I'm the
illest
lyricist
to ever
exist
, child you just got
dismissed
No chance in hell that we could ever
coexist
, go ahead slit your
wrist
I
insist
I'm not normally this
pissed
, this bitch took their best shot at me and
missed
Don't even bother
reloading
no matter what you're gonna end up
decomposing
Who's the
king
? I don't give a fuck
bring
whatever there's no way of
avoiding
"Real MC start
noting
and
quoting
," Like a bomb you're gonna end up
exploding
The only thing you're good at is deep
throating
, beat me? Bitch stop
hoping
Can't you
see
your diet of cum is not
healthy
let alone normal to any
degree
Shoot up
Jubilee
? Bitch let
me
, Like Tupac I'm blowin up and becoming
wealthy
THE DEMISE OF TRUEST MC.......
Truest
MC
? Haha ain't no
winner
, a bowl of dicks is all this kid is havin for
dinner
I'm a
sinner
, God I’m gonna be honest once, I don't have the time for a
beginner
.............
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Been getten worried that these square muthafuckers with nerves
sayin they can get with us but picture me gettin' served
My own mama say i'm thuged out
my shit be bumpin out tha record store as if it was a drug house
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