My Mini-Freestyle..! Read and Give Opinions...

[Tha Muthafuckin Don - Explicit]

Hey ya'll here my freestyle, and i want ya'll to tell me what you think of it..!


Simplistic, canabalistic, spittin shit quicker, than the 900 tony hawk trick//  Flowin like a ball on a chain// Need to time to rest, just maintain// My style on the rocks with the oceans collidin// The illest of tha newbies, all tha rest are slippin an slidin// Explicit to the end of your reign// My temper is short, i should sit, back, listen to a track an refrain// All the beef goin on down here// People dishin out threats, an causin no fear// Rember remember people with a loose cannon// Wait till your asked to interfere, you just a plastic handgun// Not qualified to be classed as dangerous// My disease will spread an cause infection, its contagous// Expect no less from the technilistic, of the realist, an the illest// The newbie with an ichy trigger finga// Tha leader of the newest newbies, with a brain thats bigger// Raps gotta flow, if not, then hit the road// Dont stand a chance, not worth beein born// Sit down, respect Explicit, or your be dead in the gutter, with your family on the side line, starting to mourn// Infectious, poisonous ryhmes, melt you down to tha ground, like a vamp in the day, afraid of the sun shine// Placing you in a house of thugs// No where to escape, filled with fear, cant hide under the rugs// Unless you think that you like a four leaf clova// As rare as a diamond, only you can get trod on and walked ova//


So what ya'll think...?


Peace -- Explicit


( The illest of the NEWBIES)

[IEMOE909]

THE POTENTIAL IS THERE. WORK ON KEEPING A PATTERN.AND ALL ELSE WILL COME TOGETHER

[Pillow]

it was to jumbbled, and made no sense....

[Entreri117]

I disagree with Tin...this rhyme was hot.  Nice shit Explicit...keep doin ya thang homie!

[Reef]

Not bad, best ive seen of your billions of rhymes u made me read..lol keep goin dawg

[Tha Muthafuckin Don - Explicit]

Thanx homies....

Need more people to review my freestyle.. lol


Peace to ya'll -- Explicit

['Illicit']

so what, freestyles mostly make no sense, unless theres a topic ur suppost to freestyle -about- other than that its jus bout droppin hot shit, and THIS was hot shit,

Simplistic, canabalistic, spittin shit quicker, than the 900 tony hawk trick//  

^^^this has GOT to be a dope freestyle line.  

keep it up man,

[Tha Muthafuckin Don - Explicit]

Hey ILLICIT, thanx man, i mean i  hear ya, thanx for all tha support you given me. I owe ya..

Peace homie -- Explicit

['Illicit']

naw you dont owe me nuttin, I love helpin out whenever I can, in case I am in need of your help, I know I can count on it. its all good.

[Tanjential]

it wasn't bad at all but it's not like it was great

i mean,he had decent vocab but he could hardly spell the words,let alone use them right

but his rhymes really are not played out,pretty original stuff,he has potential and a certain determination

and that tony hawk line was good but i dunno bout all that,still good stuff, and i give you props MC's is growin fast these days and this cat i'll be lookin out for, he reminds me of a young doggystylin/NIK......props man,keep at it...peace-Tanjint

[Tha Muthafuckin Don - Explicit]

Thanx Tanjibility.. I respect ya words, i know i need to work on it... I'll take your wise words to heart and improve dawg...


Peace to all ya homies -- Explicit