Scribe vs. Illicit 4/6

['Illicit']

aight homie, 15 lines max,  3 = KO  first to 5   everybody can vote  but no   "i vote for ..." shit.  

verses due wednesday evening

[Scribe]

Hitting you with a premptive strike
Using telecanisis to fight
Yous about to be drafted into my mind
What was orthodox is now a paradox, no need for time
My mental prowess will leave you wishing death
Taste your decomposition on my breath
Rhymes you can't write as you have a mental shutdown
About to witness a nuclear meltdown
Molecule by molecule your skills collapse
That Ill in your name about to take a nap
It just hit the sack
Ain't no way your getting it back
Looks like you can't take the psychotic heat
If I gave you a crystal ball you'd see defeat
And you wouldn't have to step up to speak.

[Hittman]

Damn Scribe, You Should Spit More Often....

['Illicit']

shit im late again, sorry dawg, checkin in...


affirmative strike back givin orders to make you stop to rap/
born to smack, Scribe wit this mic in my hand wisdom you cant overstand/
intellectual wit makin ya family havin fits, sick of this shit/
dialectical spits to hard to grasp but you scared to admit/
I prevailed before your verse was writtin, been battlin while you was still diaper shitten/
rhymes explicit, commiting verbal homicides but always get acquitted/
case no. 5 double 0-6 the people vs. Illicit, accused of givin Scribe a brutal ass-whip/
dras-tic, but nonetheless, out-standing is how I rap kid/
bring ya homies and retaliate, all I need is a mic and my mind to defeat/
step up and emit, lyrics to make you sick, insomniac cuz you adore my shit/
fuckin hypocrite, suckin dick to get hired but as soon you join a crew your ass is gettin fired/
labeled a liar, bitin rhymes off the retired, I'm that brotha wit a mask cuttin you up like mike myers/
u read the news, I make em, you speak to nudes, I rape em/
you see the difference? u wack, im crazy, gimme a reason and get wasted/
traced for escapin, my basement which u were placed in/
I get lyrical headaches for eatin aspirin, Scribe got busted, crown me the champion/

[ToNe1904]

good battle yall.

Scribes verse was pretty tight. Short, but had good flow and vocab. As well as Illicits, i think Illicit edged it out tho cus he attacked a little bit more. good battle tho.

vote=Illicit

[bLaDe]

good battle yall.

Scribes verse was pretty tight. Short, but had good flow and vocab. As well as Illicits, i think Illicit edged it out tho cus he attacked a little bit more. good battle tho.

vote=Illicit

Yea like ToNe said...it was a tight battle, but Illicit attacked more, and sum of his bars, i was really feeling....

vote - illicit

 -{bLaDe}

[NoT]

SCRIBE REVIEW
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Hmmm... I wasn't really crazy about this verse. To be honest, although it was different from most battle verses around here, it was very similar to the shit you see at other boards in every battle. A line isn't dope just because you're calling out nuclear meltdowns, telekenesis, and "psychotic heat". I know it seems harsh, because everyone else loves this verse, but I didn't notice any real wordplay here, just braggin and put-downs. It was a good verse, but you still have a lot of progressin' left to do.
Overall Rating: 3.3/5

"Knock 'Em Out" Bars
Couldn't really find any...

"Played-Out" Bars
Couldn't find anything really bad...

ILLICIT REVIEW
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Damn, man... you know I'm too tired to read all that shit. Anyway, it came off as a pretty nice verse, but it wasn't without its mistakes. For one, it was a little hard to flow too. When I judge verses I always use my second read through to try and rhyme the piece and those were some really long bars. Second, it started off a little slow. You got things together as the thing went on, but you seemed to be really grasping for a hard punch in your opening and never came up with one. Overall, this piece is better than most, but far below your norm. Good piece all the same.
Overall Rating: 3.5/5

"Knock 'Em Out" Bar(s)
u read the news, I make em, you speak to nudes, I rape em/
you see the difference? u wack, im crazy, gimme a reason and get wasted/

"Played-Out" Bar(s)
born to smack, Scribe wit this mic in my hand wisdom you cant overstand/


VOTE = Illicit

['Illicit']

aight KO,  good battle,  u should spit more often dawg, ya shits tight

[Scribe]

Congratulation on the KO Illicit.