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Pimpdogg:
One night up in the club
I was acting the thug
I was out to be seen
Dressed so fresh and so clean
Decked out in S.D.C and my Stacey A's
I'd been preparing for this night all damn day
Rolled up to the club in my car
Stepped out onto the tar
And mingled my way up to the bar
So far in the night everything's going great
Then I spotted this fine bitch her name was Kate
Walked up to Kate she was with a mate
But that didn't prevent me from starting a debate
Now the theme of this debate was what is going on late
And when these girls found out they couldn't even wait
At once these girls shook me to my core
When they picked me up and dragged me out the door
Threw me in my car and put the peddle to the floor
Arrived back at my home
Me and the girls all alone
Started having fun on the couch
Unprotected like I was fucking my spouse
Tearing at the bitches Gucci
Trying to get some coochy
Now at the end of the race
Managed to tear through the lace
Tongue kissing her lips
Those between her hips
When all three of us are done
It's time to send those bitches gone
'Cause I gotta get my sleep on
So I can do this shit tomorrow

Pillow:
WAY to simplistic, now if that was ur first rhyme ever then it was decent, but u need work homie

Reef:
Yeah man.. why too simplistic.. if your gonna improve you need to use more complex words and rhymes.. It was ight for a rookie.. but you got alot of room for improvment

Pimpdogg:
what is it with this forum, I post two rhymes and I've already got muthafuckers wanting to start battles with me. What the fuck?

Reef:

--- Quote from: Pimpdogg on October 27, 2002, 02:02:57 PM ---what is it with this forum, I post two rhymes and I've already got muthafuckers wanting to start battles with me. What the fuck?

--- End quote ---

You need to read things and relaise to take criticism.. it aint battles or shit like that.. jus tryin ya help..

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