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--- Quote from: Pimpdogg on October 27, 2002, 02:02:57 PM ---what is it with this forum, I post two rhymes and I've already got muthafuckers wanting to start battles with me. What the fuck?

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lol they need victories...no offence, it ok if u a newbie but it was very simplistic

Pillow:
its called "constructive Criticism"

Pimpdogg:
well if you want to be constructive give me a few more pointers than too simplistic, tell me what bits you didn't like, what bits you liked (if any) a bit more than too simplistic

ToNe1904:
yah, it was sumwhat simplistic. I know it was more of a story tellin style...so its not like u need tah throw a buncha metaphors in there or no shit like that but they do help. But, jus try tah come more creative wit tha story u tellin. Maybe throw a quote in there, of sumthin u said at tha club...or sumthin yah said to tha bitch u was fukin wit. Or even, a thought that passed thru yur head as u was fukin wit her, or talkin to her n whatnot. Also work on tha flow sum. There were parts where it actually flowed ok, but then other parts where tha flow was way off. Anywayz, if u are jus startin off...dont trip on it. Jus observe others, and learn frum it...we all still learnin shit. All in all...jus be more creative wit tha shit. A million muthafuckas write keystyles, and damn near everybody has heard, or wrote sumthin about seein a bitch in tha club...and takin her home. So tha only way to seperate yurself from them...is to write it in a way that they aint seen before. Jus keep elevatin yah shit...n youll be strait homie. peace

Pimpdogg:
thanks mate that was all I needed, thanks for the pointers

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