Author Topic: Depression (Feedback please)  (Read 180 times)

Pillow

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Depression (Feedback please)
« on: November 24, 2002, 09:53:46 PM »
this is far from my best work, but its just some tru thought i waz havin at the moment, lemme get some feedback please....thanks.........

Fallen into deep depression, in a rage, straight aggression//
I ma commit suicide, jump off a bridge, BITCH I aint messin//
Stop second guessin, I ll do it right now, teach u a lesson//
My family’s fucked up, caught my uncle cross dressin//
I aint got shit but my mom now//
Can’t keep thinking about this shit, hit the bong now//
Dad and uncle died in the same month….here we go again, dog….(pause)pass me the blunt//
Lets hit tha club and gather some cunt//
Cause I need some relief//
Been through a lot this year//
Being sober is my worst fear//
Tha memories of my uncle and father is what I hold dear//
For me, death is near//
But I gotta steer in the opposite direction//
Find god and turn to perfection//
Cause me commitin sucide would be to selfish//
Then my mom would be left alone in this world jus like a shell~fish//
My soul is shattered like a dropped dish//
Gotta pull it together//
Cause there aint nottin betta~then the relationship me and my mom have//
So imma stay, and take care of mom, just like u said DAD//
peace.....

~Blanket~


 

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Re:Depression (Feedback please)
« Reply #1 on: November 25, 2002, 06:21:39 AM »
tight piece, nice flow too it, felt it, and thats all that really matters 4/5  wish it would have been longer, but if it had been what more could you have said, you had it all," been threw it all, blood sweat and tears, niggahs is dead and shit"-Prodigy
 

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Re:Depression (Feedback please)
« Reply #2 on: November 25, 2002, 03:29:02 PM »
Word.. That was some reeeaaallll deep shit man.. We need to o a collabo sometime!

lIke i said. Deep shit, tight the way u got ur point accross! flow was real tight, seemed to have a good rythm..

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bez

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Re:Depression (Feedback please)
« Reply #3 on: November 25, 2002, 03:54:05 PM »
its nice, simple but nice
 

Pillow

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Re:Depression (Feedback please)
« Reply #4 on: November 25, 2002, 08:53:31 PM »
coo, thanks for the feedback guyes, keep it comin....