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J1ZM

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Post number 2....peep
« on: December 08, 2002, 12:11:29 PM »
Yo...Thanks to all the niggas who lef feedback on my first post....let me drop another one for yall niggas...



Fuck a V12 im the fastest thing when it comes to gassin bitches/
Puttin a gash in snitches, attach toe tags on fags wit gimmicks/
Get in the ass of your mistress, i heard her booty was swollen/
She woke up in the morning to find her diamonds and rubies stolen/
Check out the heat that im holdin and its about 5 below in N.Y./
Rollin wit the creeps, my crew of thieves holdin the fort/
Real ballers controllin the court, We flip keys like school janitors/
A niggas Flow got better wit age i use it to fool amateurs/
We got the streets on smash, Like we sell crack in a salvage lot/
Puttin your record on a stove burner only reason your albums hot/
Cut you from the scalp to the crotch and make beats with your organs/
Started Torchin the mic wit lyrics that torture and scorch kids/
Steal from a rich or a poor kid, they all got something i like/
While you touch youngsters in a funny way just to be like mike(jackson)/
Dont need to read you your rights cause u got cuffed by my fist/
Believe me you gon get dissed and left pissed if u step to the JIZ..


For all my west coast niggas, 1
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Koncept

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Re:Post number 2....peep
« Reply #1 on: December 08, 2002, 12:23:03 PM »
just trying to help you out

flow was choppy in  spots
words were lacking in spots, seemed like you cand do better
to me it's like you build your lines up then fall short with the rhyming
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J1ZM

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Re:Post number 2....peep
« Reply #2 on: December 08, 2002, 12:26:29 PM »
?.....where does that flow lack?......u must be kiddin.
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J1ZM

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Re:Post number 2....peep
« Reply #3 on: December 08, 2002, 12:28:01 PM »
by the way....i fall short with the rhymin?....no offense but u need to learn something about flow...ask anyone in here and theyll tell you that that rhyme right there FLOWS....
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'Illicit'

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Re:Post number 2....peep
« Reply #4 on: December 08, 2002, 02:25:11 PM »
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Fuck a V12 im the fastest thing when it comes to gassin bitches/
Puttin a gash in snitches, attach toe tags on fags wit gimmicks/
^^that shit right there was off tha heezy. the rest was tight too.

keep that up homie.
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Koncept

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Re:Post number 2....peep
« Reply #5 on: December 08, 2002, 02:55:57 PM »
Damn, i was just trying to help a borther out
« Last Edit: December 08, 2002, 02:57:26 PM by Koncept »
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Xearo

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Re:Post number 2....peep
« Reply #6 on: December 08, 2002, 05:37:46 PM »
I agree wit Illicit....

Shit was tight...

Keep em comin J...
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Pillow

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Re:Post number 2....peep
« Reply #7 on: December 08, 2002, 08:43:30 PM »
2 posts
2 tight asss rhymes
keep em comin man, we need this type more around here.....
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@Ss@sSiN

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Re:Post number 2....peep
« Reply #8 on: December 09, 2002, 06:37:49 AM »
ya that shit was off the hinges
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