It's May 16, 2024, 09:44:20 AM
I think this is dope, BOX. I would change a few words on the hook just so it sounds better though.everybody been telling me the whole world's braillin mefrom the moment they checc'd checc'd out my melody/others might be fly,but i am fly-eryou lookin for that new shit, i'm yo su-pli-er/ 2xThat to me sounds like it flows better imo.
Add scratches to the hook from "Check Out My Melody" where you said "checc'd out my melody" instead of spittin it...That'd make it sound better IMO. Kinda how Premier does it. Plus it'd be an homage to the old school.Also, I think the hook is long a bit...try this:everybody tellin me the whole world's braillin mefrom the moment that they/*sample* *scratches*others might be fly,but i am fly-eryou lookin for that new shit, i'm yo su-pli-er/ 2xThe first verse is actually dope, but the rhyme is off a bit I think, what about this?most of y'all ain't never heard of me beforebecause i'm underground,& I only sell at the mom & pop stores/yet,when i get to spit'n fans get to aww shit'n,head bob'n, admittin' that they smitten/wit my shit causei put it down and bull's eye the targetword of mouth spreadin' round through-out all markets/every day I got new fans bumpin tracks of mine tho knowin'I don't have a album out but i'm who, they quote'n,/i'm nice with it, fans co signinthey bacc burner their yesterday fav's in no time/mc's changin they style and they flow up,& they rhymes soundin' similar to mines,/& since my dicc now weighs a ton,i got a shot at going gold or pla-tin-um/i'm just speaking bout the fresh mc's with a buzz,and y'all know that i'm one of them, be-cause/
I suppose that's true, especially considering Ra sold only like 20 copies on his last album.Hey BOX, check out that track I posted here: http://www.zshare.net/audio/78679015170bb4e2/ I need some feedback.
dope shit man. record it
dope shit my equal yell