freestyle 2

[Ignyte]

Every damn night i try and write a rhyme.
By the time i write he first, i fuck up the next line.
Im sick of these faggots who keep to keep trying.
Coz when they write that shit, you know they be lying.
You catch them biting lyrics which they are still denying.
Stand up and put down some authority and they run off crying.
Catch them with a collection of cds that you been buying.
The next day hes saying your lines and wearing your clothes, this nigga must be spying.
Its as if this kid is looking into your eyes and reading your mind.
Hes walking down hollering at bitches saying hes on the grind.
But the girls that he be picking up, you must think that he is blind.
Coz compared to your woman, his aint even half as fine.
His dont have that sparkle like a fine bottle of wine.
You see him walking and lighting a smoke as if it was a crime.
He think that now he is exactly like you, but your trully genuine.
In 5 seconds he thinks hes got talent, but it aint that easy to find.

feedback plz

[White-Chocolate]

good shit playa but i didn't understand dis line?? "Im sick of these faggots who keep to keep trying." mainly (who keep to keep trying), maybe just a mix up of words, other then that, keep doing yo thug thizzle, peace  

[Ignyte]

good shit playa but i didn't understand dis line?? "Im sick of these faggots who keep to keep trying." mainly (who keep to keep trying), maybe just a mix up of words, other then that, keep doing yo thug thizzle, peace  

I mean like on Joe Dirt where he says "Keep on, keeping on" a bit like that. Basically they are trying to keep writing bullshit lyrics.