Da notorious mack VS wicked illness

[wicked illness]

5 bars max
4-0 ko, other wise to five
no crew, hate, or newbie votes lol!!!....
no swaying votes......

drop soon.......

[wicked illness]

here you go kid......make sure you drop by the end of the day
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I am-spittin-pain, my-shit-is-insane, suckin' a wet dick is the only time your spittin’-with-brains!!!                      1
i drop sick for wins-at this kid's expense-rip your skull open so "your-thoughts-make-sense”// (his brain wud make contact with air)      2
this little creep, is like ripped open sheep~cuz hes dissin'-with-no-guts~you’ll get-your-legs-cut so when your "de-feated" you’ll have to-pick-yourself-up!!!       3
i hate-to-be-rude to-expose-this-wack-dude but if will smith ever won a battle then-its-against-you!!!      4
Iam-exposing-fake-thugs with facts to-make-you-wake-up and I aint-afraid-cuzz you pull as many punches as-a-snake-does!!!!(get it a snake has no arms)         5
This kid is prolly lost-on-facts cuz-he-macks as many bitches as carrot top when-he-acts!!!           6
I’ll leave you flattened with my-rhyme-pattern smack you so hard your head wud have a halo like Saturn!!!          7
If you ate sugar your rhymes wudnt get sweat I put fatsoes like you in disbelief mack though it was about food when he said biggie won the beef!!!  8
(he thinks biggie beat 2pac)

finisher:
you need to elevate cuz your rhymes are lightweight
you were destined to lose that’s why I only wrote 8!!!

[wicked illness]

yo, you got till the end of the day to post a rhyme.........


peace

[|JEM|ILL|]

...vet of what?...please..

[ARYC]

"you were destined to lose that’s why I only wrote 8!!!"

well the bar limit is 5.so u went over the limit...that kinda throws the argument that u are overlooking Mack ,out the window.

and ur multis need work..ur punches aren't all that ,but keep at it

[da_notorious_mack]

Wicked-Illness?...bitch please you a cold-at-best..
im bold-wit-text..ya against a vet wit untold-respect..
i hold the crown-still,any rook im bound-ta-kill..
past ya 1st bar,like a "Grant injury",ya verse went "down-hill"..(Grant Hill)
ya wouldnt be dope if ya were slangin-ya-verses..im bangin-wit-curses...
ya wanna chill wit tha God?..ill leave you hangin-from-churches..

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Get the picture,ya scriptures,aint hit hard..
so motherfucka i went 1 better an dropped 6 bars..

[wicked illness]

1st off.....why the fuck both you freeposting in a battle...i dont want a fucking analysis.....thats why they vote when the battle is finished.....


5bars = 10 lines  

votes?

[ARYC]

here goes :

Wicked illness:
u need to work on a lot of stuff:most ur multis aren't real ,"am-spittin-pain", "my-shit-is-insane" for example,not only does the 2nd one have more syllables BUT only the last syllable of each rhymes....so it would be easier to point out all the real multis in ya verse(not many) than to point out ya bad ones (they are the majority)plus ya multis are forced,a lot of ppl do this,they feel like they NEED to put every single multi they can think of in the verse and it doesn't make for a good verse.
ur punches are kinda weak..."you need to elevate cuz your rhymes are lightweight
you were destined to lose that’s why I only wrote 8!!!"for example ,now it's not necessarily bad in other circumstances BUT the bar limit is 5 so u went over the bar limit (i've explained why i don't like this punch in the post b4)
2/5 :sub par but keep at it and u'll get there

Mack:
flow was nice as always ,sum nice lines but u loose points because u fed of wicked illness's verse in one line "o motherfucka i went 1 better an dropped 6 bars.. ".Most ur multis were on point,
4/5


WINNER:MACK

[Kill]

Well...

WICKED ILLNESS:
You prolly not very experienced so considerin you a newbie I think it wasn't bad, but like sicstyle¨said you got alot to learn; most multis weren't multis at all, I JUST DON'T UNDERSTAND why many people connect-words-for-no-damn-reason-at-all. Your punches were pretty basic too

MACK:
yup, never make references to your opponent's verse...your shit was very short, but you included a few nice lines and punches, the chillin with the god line was the best of the battle

VOTE = MACK

[ARYC]

"5bars = 10 lines"

woops!!!!ur right .i'm sorry .but mack still wins though

[Primo]

that whole de-feat line was mine before....DONT BITE..i have used it in a battle a long long time ago

[da_notorious_mack]

that whole de-feat line was mine before....DONT BITE..i have used it in a battle a long long time ago

LOL...primo should jus ghostwrite fa ppl

[|JEM|ILL|]

This cat thinks he actually got skillz with that played wack shit...


ANYWAY!!!!

Vote=MACK, He won this easily because unlike the other cat he had good multies, and punches...lol

KO im out...

[wicked illness]

no offense ^^^but your the biggest dickriding faggot i ever seen......

[|JEM|ILL|]

no offense ^^^but your the biggest dickriding faggot i ever seen......

explain how me dissin ya cockiness is dick riding?