Check These Two Raps Out.............

[Ghetto Preacher]

i have written a rap song, not sure on what to call it but here it is.

I just sit back and think about the world//
Wonder when the first body felled//
Was it before the Christ or after his death//
Was he chopped up and served by a chef//
So many wars so many dead and we still haven’t learned//
People always thought of killing as their minds churned//
Whether its racial or personal people still get a beating//
You’ll never survive this world unless you’re the one that comes out the meeting//
After two world wars we still haven’t learned our lesson//
Countries still out there messing//
Whether its external or internal people still getting killed//
To many holes being made and then being filled//
Guns now being sold in shooting monthly//
You can get hold of them in every single country//
It can take one shooting and you’re the new dictator//
Just like Bush and Blair, the mick taker//
Come into the lime light and now causing a big shaker//
Bush is trying to be the next big creator//
But I’ve never seen anything faker//
Sort out your own country before taking over others//
See 13 year olds are still becoming new mothers//
Being made pregnant by their big brothers//
Just because the family never had a real lover//
See why the fuck do will still bother//

Why are people still dieing//
Why are people still left crying//
Why arent people learning from their mistakes//
Why arent we making the changes, thats all it takes//
Why//
x2

Too many questions without answers//
Too many little girls become table top dancers//
Going on the game to make a living//
People always taking but never giving//
People still living on the street at night//
Waking up knowing that they have another day to fight//
Why are we living like this, through all this shite//
Youngsters going out for under age drinking//
Why are we letting them, what are we thinking//
Having sex at a younger age//
Teenage births have just gone straight off the gage//
At the age of 12 going on the pill//
Then going out for a quick cheap thrill//
Letting some old man cut through them like a drill//
Two years later they finally get impregnated//
All just because they were never really educated//
Having to sell drugs or their body to pay for the baby//
This sorta life is just completely crazy//
People dont believe it happens cause there to dammed daizy//

Why are people still dieing//
Why are people still left crying//
Why arent people learning from their mistakes//
Why arent we making the changes, thats all it takes//
Why//
x2

A kids mum and dad leave them on the streets//
Left there for more than a couple of weeks//
Making a living by tapping out some simple beats//
Gets a few coppers for playing a banjo//
This ent no life for a kid ya know//
All they own is a bag of raggy clothes if there lucky//
Mothers say to their children "stay away, they too mucky"//
Living on the streets for years on end is no life//
Knowing that at any time they could be robbed by a man with a knife//
Probley just counting down to the end//
Just waiting for death must drive them round the bend//
Once the cough starts theres no return//
Knowing their next to take their turn//
No one would notice them gone so why should we worry//
No need to save them, whats the hurry//
Its there own fault, they chose to take that route//
So lets blank them out, leave them on mute//
Thats all the government say//
Imagine everyone gave up a month pay//
We might be able to save world hunger//
So why are we making this shit last longer//

Why are people still dieing//
Why are people still left crying//
Why arent people learning from their mistakes//
Why arent we making the changes, thats all it takes//
Why//
x3

this is a rap i am currently working on.

Im hearing a lot of shit from my Israeli friend//
Telling how this man called George W Bush was trying to make a mend//
But what we are all hearing on the news is just all pretend//
Trying to fix everything in the world//
Trying to make it safe for a little baby girl//
But he’s doing it all wrong, going in with guns blazin//
The news is saying what he is doing is just amazing//
Blair is helping him to do his shit//
Am I the only one who sees that they are taking the mick//
We gotta make a change and we gotta do it quick//
Or we could see another world war on are hands//
But this time we could all be fighting for the wrong man//
We gotta do summit, its time to make a stand//
I just ent another rapper out to make a quick fortune//
I ent here to just do this tune//
Im here to tell the truth to everyone//
I cant just sit back and look on//
Something has gotta be done//

Its time to fight back//
Get all the countries you want bush cause im about to attack//
You must have had it bad as a kid//
Cause no one I know would do what you did//
If you wasn’t American you would be a dictator//
And you would be the world’s number one hater//
Killing little kids and their families//
Destroying all sorts of humanities//
Cause here we are singing god save the queen//
Thinking that our country is so clean//
When we are the ones behind all the commotion//
Are world is going in a backwards motion//
This man Bush needs to get a demotion//
Following in his fathers foot steps//
Bombing innocent people, what the fucks gonna come next//
Its bad enough that Blair is twat//
But now he’s shouting his mouth off cause he’s on Bush’s back//
A bit of understanding is what the countries lack//


could you please tell me what you think of these raps and whether you think i have got what it takes, maybe you could show me how to improve.

[bez]

good like very basic but good.

[Ghetto Preacher]

thanks for the feedback but i would like to have some more so come on people tell me what you think, say what you like about it............

[Bramsterdam (see ya)]

yeah,

good.