tell me how u feel (and) or battle!

[*Z* - The Queen of Dubcc]

im gonna rap black cuz im gonna be black ma mind born black get back, son! u cant kill dis skillz//
u cant kill like me, cuz everythin u sings just things bout Gs, girls, cars, fat MCs and unpayble billz//
most of u dont know whats rap at all, cuz u just piss wid diss like "ur a pussy" on da wall//
u hussy think at first then spit, cuz probably there aint even spit but vomit!wheres yo gift?CALL IT!//
i just wanna take a look at yo cook!...cookin rhymez like neva done in all americanhistorytimez//
its like dream ma mind scream n fly to da underground and cry around i dont even try around to get da tightest sound//
cuz ive fear of some fuckers who tear up da lifez of the others and wipe away from da foreground//
NO, it aint fear, i guess its god's tear consist of blood, and like a fist was runnin ma mouth till i understood//
and imma do dis fuckin way maybe i wasted dis fuckin day, but when u have somethin aginst me just can say...//
BITCH!

['Illicit']

im gonna rap black cuz im gonna be black ma mind born black get back, son! u cant kill dis skillz//

yo you white or black? cuz this aint made sense to me.

overall it was average, coulda been better

[Kill]

it was ok, but i'm not gonna battle it. and yeah, can't figure what that line's supposed to say either

[*Z* - The Queen of Dubcc]

i think its easy to relize
it means im white!
im da fuck white and im a girl!
so...thats all i have to say first....
somethin else?
i think it was okay,....for a freestyle
peace

[*Z* - The Queen of Dubcc]

oh wait, it means....though im white, i feel black, okay?

['Illicit']

lol, well go get ya sum melanin, that oughta help

[*Z* - The Queen of Dubcc]

lol, well go get ya sum melanin, that oughta help

what da fuck?
why aint u able to say sum real thinx and justrunnin yo mouth!
that ought be help?
okay, tell me what was halfassed help posted by Illicit aka CeeRide!?
fuckin name it aint even a fight its just mums arguments which hit me over!?
dumb man, just dumb!
i bet u cant even tell me what you think is bad to ma freestyle,.......cmon, son, tell me!

[*Z* - The Queen of Dubcc]

lol, tell me now what u can say to this one:


ive known alotta people who gotta fear of sum people ,other people, people like they have neva had to be//
i see saw have seen it everyday the way people talk, speak but say nuthin//
walked around but saw nuthin, cuz allway hide their eyez from somethin//
singin bout da healthy world, and tryin to feel everything real but its absurd//
they picked on sum others and raped all their muthers, so there are now the sons of da sins//
their fins in the air, aginst the others its like aginst da breath aginst da sphere till u breathe da death//
till da death breathe you, eat you thru and dont even say thank you, too//
cuz he knows da thong and stuff , he snuff it thru everythin and all cuz of ma agression-call ...//
 i killed ma favorite doll and ma old model at all cuz allot of em wrote wid ma blood "ur damn hitler!" on da wall!//
u dont know ma name da hood ma foot, ma sole ma greatest hall where ive rhyme all da time , i fucked u too//
ive neva called u, pussys, neva wanted u to rate about ma fate , hate me thru and tell girls aint able be rap,i rap back, shit on yo true!//
cuz know u what bitchez?, iam a fuckin girl and mayb b able to kill sum wannabe-Gs and stuff, try better!//
but u know ma mind, ma mind finds a way to write some rights of  humen/woman in one of all in 1 fuckin letter!//

just rate it first but can battle 2 if u wanna spit aginst da wind:)
peace
battle is nuthin personal, i guess!

['Illicit']

yo, wtf? first of all half of the shit u wrote was bs cuz  "I see saw have seen it" and the rest of your so called "rate my battle-rhyme" makes about as much sense as if u would think your coming here is valuable to the board so spare me your "wisdom".

look, your shit is if rated about average and receives an "ok" on my scale. I aint the best myself but I know enough to rate and judge rhymes and beat that shit you wrote anytime. here, my honest opinion. deal wit it

[*Z* - The Queen of Dubcc]

tahts okay man, just come down and relax sum,...i understood yo meanin and i said its okay, but cen u tell me why u say its "ok"
cuz u gave me an answer though u didnt even get da question...
just tell me what can i do better, or what du u think aint good enough or bad or sumthin....
what da fuck du u mean wid ma "wisdom"?
i didnt get it! i have neva claim im sage or something...
so man dont be so angry, b/c i accepted yo fuckin mind, but i guess u dont respect me.......
but it doesnt matter at all,...
and know u what? i aint valuable, believe me, i heard it thru everywhere, so i would neva think, claim or somethin else, but just dont give a fuck and forget it, u rated ma shit, and i know i aint as good as you, but imma work and try and mayb one time gain some respect,...but dont care
thanx tho u even gave me sum answeres,...
cu
peace

[AlerG]

not the greatest keystyle, ok i guess, peace.

[OLD ACCOUNT PLZ DELETE INDY]

WTF? why you tripping yo'self over Ceeride.. you should be god dayum honorued you got some feedback, hollaring and hooting, shhhhiiiat im tripping over my raps that aint got no feedback except my own.. dayum quit whining.. he just said "ok" if ya dont like it.. shove it.. no offense, but we work hard i do to spill my pain to paper and if you gotta trip on a vote.. then i'll take it coz its better than none.. aite peace..

Ceeride... dont let no body trip on you man.. i gotcha back..
call me a dickryda? lol.. haha.. i'll just laugh coz i'd expect that from anyone who's pissed off .. lol anyways peace!

['Illicit']

yo look, the melanin part was a joke aight, and ur rhyme imo was ok, why, because I think your lines dont match, readin one line and then the next theres nothing they have in common, get some punches, metaphors and multies tho multies aint everything but helpful if brought to the table right. develop a flow, keep practicing.

its like :

im gonna rap black cuz im gonna be black ma mind born black get back, son! u cant kill dis skillz//
u cant kill like me, cuz everythin u sings just things bout Gs, girls, cars, fat MCs and unpayble billz//

this was good cuz the lines matched, tho too long, the flow is off and well, its a played out cliche. coulda made it sound more interesting. it may be a punchline in a way, but a soft one, it wouldnt help beat the opponent when voted on.

just keep at it.

i aint too good at explainin but here, i aint trippin

thanks indy, ill holla at ya bout collabos

[OLD ACCOUNT PLZ DELETE INDY]

aite i'll holla at you soon!
peace man!

you on msn?

[*Z* - The Queen of Dubcc]

okay, all good,....sorry men, i got dumb and , i admit, did bad ba maself, cuz i ought to be glad u gave me votez and thanx at all
i had a bad time last few dayz so i was a lil bit irritable, im sorry!
ma execution was strange, wasnt it?
i think u are all right wid yo oppinions and imma practice it out, man, i swear, imma do this!
and  i think da freestylez wasnt bad at first, but there are a lotta linez didnt make sence, but some linez werent bad at all!and u saw it, thats all good!
so i cant apologize da way i acted b4,...but if i wouldnt try i wouldnt gain or lose and both is important i guess....
so thanx, Illicit aka CeeRide, whateva this meanin :) u gave me some certitude what da mistakez were,.....and i didnt chafe any time, Indecisive,
u dont sound all like indecision himself  :)
but okay al good, thanks guys!
i get everything!
peace
 :'(