Independant Reliance (FEEDBAK, put heart into this 1)

[TiNmaN]

(2x)
If ya wanna succeed be persistant, independant RELAIANCE//
Will get you by in this life, and thatz no LYIN//
Mind, body n' soul is tha only ALLIANCE, you need to take on your personal GIANTZ//
Quite simple, far frum SCIENCE//
Just 2 words to remeber....."INDEPENDANT RELIANCE//
(2x)I

Mind iz my own-HOME//
Solo.....in tha ZONE//
Sur-name "Kulkin" cuz i am ALONE//
Control my own ACTIONZ, so i know the outcome n' REACTIONZ//
Dividin Coke GRAMZ like FRACTIONZ//
Wieght being pushed heavy felt like fatal ATTRACTIONZ//
Slang an 8ball, 10 minutez later, another TRANZACTION//
Fuk w/ my money, become an ABSTRACTION//
Decomposing matter//
More shattered vital partz then stepz on a LATTER//
Got me in a rage, MADDER then the HATTER//
1 deep, N' i still make tha hardest crewz SCATTER//
Flee the scene//
Voice-boxless, new name given,   MR BEAN//
Shoulda been FORSEEN, seein tha fact itz a regular ROUTINE//
Werd shoulda gotta around by now TiNmaN untouchable//
Far frum RUSH-A-BLE, buck shotz make ya say "Never seeen SUCH-A-WHOLE//
Had enough? Shut-your-HOLE//
I reguglate like matildaz Ms. CRUCH-BOLE//
I am ON-A-ROLL, like butter on bread//
Smooth aim w/  gunz, n in tha BED//
Cover the problem like cheese SPREAD//
Your not MIS-LEAD, everything your reading is REAL//
It may be UN-REAL, But youll jus hav to DEAL, w/ the fact that if u disrespect me i ll ride on yo ass like-a AUTOMOBILE//

(2x)
If ya wanna succeed be persistant, independant RELAIANCE//
Will get you by in this life, and thatz no LYIN//
Mind, body n' soul is tha only ALLIANCE, you need to take on your personal GIANTZ//
Quite simple, far frum SCIENCE//
Just 2 words to remeber....."INDEPENDANT RELIANCE//
(2x)


Can i please get sum feedbak on this, heart went inta thisa one......thankz

[OLD ACCOUNT PLZ DELETE INDY]

Tight ass flow.. felt the hole ryhming scheme bro.. still on top.. anyways where you bin all this time?

[Reef]

Yeah i was feelin this one.. Nice rhyme man

[M Dogg™]

very nice. Tight shit homeboy.

[maximus]

if u put ur heart into this u either aint got a heart or u a wack emcee... coz u wasn sayin shit... lyrically it was quiet borin i aint hatin dawg... this was any other rhyme to me... all it had was flow no topic no content just a buncha lines put together which means nothin...

i could spit 2 lines n it could be deepa than that...

Aboriginals got lakes-n-frogs-n-land-to-see, shame that it was like we were shot in da face the way we was taken-from-our-families....
Australian govt tells us not-to-stand-up, but they murdered our richest culture n threw it away like Nazi propoganda...
Now all we known for is bein alcoholiks-on-da-street, but western civilisation killed our ppl off since the first ship-of-the-fleet...

there ya go n i didn even put my heart in that... dnt type what rhymes dawg... type whatcha would say
~1~

[maximus]

altho this peice was boring to me

Far frum RUSH-A-BLE, buck shotz make ya say "Never seeen SUCH-A-WHOLE//

that shit was ill to me stay up

~1~

[bez]

As Maxi said the rhyme seemed to be thrown together just using words that rhyme but not really in a constructive way.  Almost like every line was wrote with no thought but just with a few words and then a word that rhymed with the last line.

The peice was ok and shit but wasn't any thing amazing.

[TiNmaN]

^^ Yea i feel what yall 2 are sayin, n i thank u for ur input. When i put on the thread "Put my heart into this 1" That was jus sumtin to try to get ppl in here lol cuz i hadnt been gettin no replyz on nottin i was droppin. But its all good, thanks to those who dropped feed so far, still UPPIN

[Dreamz]

yo that was tight
keep it up