Comments please

[Thinklove]

This is my first keystyle on this page I just wanna know what ya think about my lines.....keep in mind that I'm from Sweden english is just my second language!

I focus on odiuos opponents, Who rhyme components seem bogus//
Conjure up magic scrolls that hex this trolls whit hocus pocus//
Your getting green like the mask thanks to all that herbal//
I sent you to sky your getting high thanks to all my verbal//
Combine "You is good" whit a movie and that would be "Liar Liar"//
Cos you lyrics wouldn´t even be close to hot if ya put em on fire//
Your that sell out ya got to be fucking "promo sexual"//
Homo sexual?, to you even the best treatment is ineffectual-
073 964 75 44, now ya can give the metaphorical oracle a call//
I´ll make ya crawl around my feets after this story that´s allegorical//
I´ll sneak in to your seremonial chaple, have my self a litte grappel//
steal someof your booze take a snapple and then slash your adams apple//
Stuck in a fucking handicap match I´ll remov my fingertips//
I´m still a thigter writer the Epox bitch still virgin pussy lips//
You stepp to this thinking everything is so goddamn peachy//
But in this fucking battle I am like the Romans, "Veni, Vidi, Vici"//

kisses and hugs/TK

[da_notorious_mack]

damn sight betta than most the new blood...stick around blud....

[Thinklove]

thanks man....

[Inspectah]

Word.. concrete dawg!

[Dreamz]

very good keep it up
Peace

['Illicit']

shit, you used more vocab than i do most of the time so ur english is right there dawg. nice piece

[Thinklove]

Thanks for all the good comments, HOw do you do if ya wanna drop against someone in the keystyle battle forum,?

[kickz_deluxe]

yeah, props, really tight. when did u start writing?
just would be interested in.
keep working

['Illicit']

go into Key Style,and call the desired person out, or accept/decline his or hers challenge. then go into Key Style Battleboard to battle em.

[Thinklove]

I've just been writing for  about 4 month's on swedish and about 2 months on english. I'll try to keep up and be better

pusspuss whit meens kisses on Swedish haha

[Thinklove]

I've just been writing for  about 4 month's on swedish and about 2 months on english. I'll try to keep up and be better

pusspuss witch meens kisses on Swedish haha

[kickz_deluxe]

wow, just 2 months? then ur very talented!
pusspuss..u remember me on one of ma friends