Author Topic: Un-named... But labelled.. ??  (Read 101 times)

Inspectah

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Un-named... But labelled.. ??
« on: March 29, 2004, 04:39:05 AM »
I sit down standing, eyes closed but glancing.
Body froze but dancing, relaxed but stressed out.
Free of thought, but thinking what im depressed about.
Fist clenched, stretching fingers to click my joints.
Every line off target, but intentioned to hit its points.
Stuck on life support, but i've used my life line.
My touch is dazey, not an alocoholic but i like wine.
Theirs a limit to my temper, i have a high tolerance to pain.
I dont know who the hell i am, i know myself and my name.
The to the brink of a break down, i wanna be a councellor.
I hate star wars, but im inspired by the naboo's chouncellor.
Evil but good, rotten but rype, seductive yet paced.
I retired my wheels of battle ryhming, altho i still raced.

^^ jus' something i wrote.. i was bored.. and i wanted to do something different...
 

kickz_deluxe

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Re:Un-named... But labelled.. ??
« Reply #1 on: March 29, 2004, 06:37:57 AM »
i think some linez were a bit weak compared with a good line like:Evil but good, rotten but rype, seductive yet paced.
i guezz u should take every piece u wrote in tha last timez together n look for tha good linez, pick em up n use for sumthin bigger, ya know?
cuz there was always good linez in em! keep work up dawg
even a long way gon end once
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I see no changes, all I see is racist faces
misplaced hate makes disgrace to races
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bez

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Re:Un-named... But labelled.. ??
« Reply #2 on: March 29, 2004, 02:49:19 PM »
felt it dawgg