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[Dreamz]

yo it's been awhile but lets see if I still got it.....Its a freestyle to this cutie I like........... I did uses some of Juvenile words I though it was hot but let me know what ya'll think

Can I have world in my palm,with my girl inside my arm
I love you because of your charm,
Watching you sleep till early in the morn,
The love I give you is nothing but strong,
Any other way would just be wrong,
I'll never beat up them chicks up in my home,
I will always tell you the truth baby you know your never wrong,
Now, make it official and Let get up and lets be gone,
I don't mind buying for you, you riding too,
don't be afraid to ask me cause I'm her for you,
Lil mamma my minds right I aint playin you,
I know no one can do better than I could do,
The girl form angola outside of derby,
I'll stop runnin with the boy mainly jay and herby,
Can a guy from the rez get a chance with it,
We had fun that night but a kiss can I have it,

That was it the girl liked it I did to but yo feedback would be nice...thanks

['Illicit']

wadnt bad, keep on writin some shit for her maybe u'll get more than a kiss.