Author Topic: shitty and basic new verse (Read 186 times)

Lunatic · « **on:** October 02, 2008, 02:14:06 PM »

u can catch me with a 4-4 on the block
pop squeeze and cock
shut down ya whole block
over a petty crack rock
i got them boys on lock
risin' up like my stock
keep bitches by the flock
watch em jump on the cock
tell me i rock they sock
me, boy u best not mock
movin' work like the hands on a clock
rhymin words all day
catch a bullet via stray
write dope shit if i may
and for this u gotta pay
in ya girl bed where i lay
at the top where im'a stay
ridin big like santa's slay
get popped by the K
name start with a J
same thing on my feet
rappin' to the beat
all day i bring that heat
ya girl want my meat
my rhymes oh so neat
like wayne, goin for a 3-peat
like da homie, im back
this shit u best not jack
mic skills is what you lack
and im known as a mack
for dope shit i got a knack
ridin' round with my pack
that girl got a big ol' rack
throw at her a stack
fo' i go talk 2 her, pop a tic-tac
now u thinkin this drop was wack

El the Self Image · « **Reply #1 on:** October 02, 2008, 04:02:34 PM »

in the spirit of "constructive feedback", here goes....

That's got to be one of the most stable rhyme patterns I've ever seen in my life....

That said, it's also one of the most simple.... No matter what hood you're in, intelligence is NOT YOUR ENEMY...
I know you got, show it....

You said it yourself, "shitty and basic..." I look forward to reading something that you put more effort into....