Author Topic: obedient peace (Read 101 times)

Qurate-L · « **on:** March 15, 2004, 11:37:47 AM »

i wrote this one pretty quick anyway rate drop critisism tell me what needs to be improved ect.

Chorus x2
do clear your mind as you decease/
for fear you find the end of peace/
you hope to reach these deviants/
you wont for peace is just obediance/

in this life there is no peace only obediance to last/
every person has the urge to choose the easiest path/
no reason to ask, one day our race will dig to deep/
we only started and already its not safe to sleep/
you need to ask yourself is it pivotal or will it ever be/
is our worst fear hell or is it our greatest enemy/
too many questions just one mind to comprehend/
every day i wonder if i could really defend/
against all the evil and corruption brought into this life/
kamikaze soldiers attacking born to sacrifice/
in this play we say goodbye to the pentagon/
the obediance has been disturbed from where i enter on/
one by one every land mark taken off the map/
with the twin towers taken out in the second act/
every day arises a sicker fact but i keep control/
no lucifer wont take me back i wont sell my soul/

Chorus x2

what you think exists may yet be undone/
and whats in your mind may be what becomes/
ill never follow into this concept of peace/
obediance,loss of identity or have my soul released/
the media eats away at our very integrity/
day after dark day my visions continue plaguein me/
i see the world that we live in now/
with our leaders bringing theyre countries down/
tell me how could this be what we had in mind/
we might as well all be bound and tied/
with innocence found and tried cuz in the end/
theres no such thing as self defense/
people only see me not my innovated intentions/
when i grow so freely bin debated as deception/
"its better to die on your feet then live on one knee"/
said best "id rather be dead then living obediantly"/

chorus 2x

will peace ever be a real possability/
noone knows, for now we control the hostility/
you cant disturb the peace only step outta line/
you with one word decease or step out in time/
as you decent into cries of overwhelming confusion/
think about how peace is the overselling illusion/
seems our final conclusion is while under control we face/
and hold a chance of ascending after deaths cold embrace/
but when this test holds your fate will you walk out/
or will you stay no questions asked with no doubt/
remeber this our nemesis was the genasis/
for every principle and prenthasis/
every day some people ask the same question/
was the life we live now our true intention
this thought will you after meeting it cease/
has it ever been real or was it always obediant peace/

Inspectah · « **Reply #1 on:** March 17, 2004, 03:00:27 PM »

This was interesting and rather looong but no excuses not to read it. i read it and i liked the chorus, i cant do hooks and i thought this was good. i liked the verses, lyrically good overall, scheme was nice, and the flow of the lines was nice and short. keep it up!